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Since The Fall (Ode) by harrytuttle

I'm wond'ring now A year's gone by Could it have been so long ago? It seems like only yesterday I'm hunkered down I'm looking up The danger looms like thunderheads What lies ahead? Everything's changed And everything is still the same Are we united one to one? We tread on thin ice everyday But still go bowling, still play golf Nothing is changed Everything's changed

god'swife 24-Sep-02/8:28 AM
L12 & 13 could be a poem on there own, Good. the last 2 lines are over used. I think the poem would do better without them.




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