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Re: Taller Girl by lastobelus 20-Mar-03/12:05 PM
this would be my edit:

taller girl whirled her skirt
in segregated circles
drawing boundaries all around her with it,
while her hair lashed out in little black laraits
and, her long arms aloft,
that skirt floated up towards them,
wooshing out and drawing her space unusually wide,
as she was unusually tall
as if she could eclipse herself in it

one drum and one guitar
and then another
and under
her circling hair, her face comes,
cover comes under that silken black
and once more coming ?round
with her hair flying up
I saw furled brows and closed, black-lined eyes
and a mouth turned down in studied oblivion;
but another coming around
had an opened eye and red upturned lips
under the flying glimpse of hair,
so that I saw that she saw
that I saw her,

and then she whirled away
into the center
until I saw only the fringe of her hair
flying over the heads of all the others,
and my moment, crushed
under her stamping boots

Re: Knights of progress 'alter boy shamed' by Bachus 8-Oct-02/10:52 PM
your poems are often so convoluted that i can't decide if they are genius or chum. they make the ganglia twitch, itch, bitch. ditch me. lick me.
Re: Essential Love by unknown 8-Oct-02/10:46 PM
when i read this, i feel putrid all over. what treacly tripe.
Re: Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan 26-Sep-02/12:10 AM
Why do you punctuate like that?
Re: The Drive In (Drugs broke her, she broke me) by <{Baba^Yaga}> 26-Sep-02/12:08 AM
This poem makes me want to go out and buy a 40-Oz. Make that 2. Works every time.
Re: Morning conflict by INTRANSIT 26-Sep-02/12:04 AM
20 oz. ought to do it nicely. Nicely done.
Re: calendared by cobalt 26-Sep-02/12:03 AM
Good sounds here, but meter is uneven.
Re: Since The Fall by harrytuttle 26-Sep-02/12:01 AM
My goldfish grew an inch.
Re: Taffy by knickytoy 25-Sep-02/11:58 PM
Sticky. Good, because it's not been pulled too far.
Re: myself by decadentlaurel 25-Sep-02/11:54 PM
Unfinished sentences; missing punctuation and capitalisation; the bubonic plague?
Re: glory bar realities by royalflesh 25-Sep-02/11:52 PM
Prankster or no, he's a fascinating protagonist, in this story too. When do the others get to speak?
Re: Noblesse Oblige by Christof 25-Sep-02/11:50 PM
Silly bird. Smart poem.
Re: The Nights Draw In by Nicholas Jones 25-Sep-02/11:48 PM
Great. Really great evocation.
Re: a comment on The Writing Life #2 by poetandknowit 25-Sep-02/11:38 PM
You're going to send him that $30 anyways, aren't you?
Re: a comment on The Writing Life #2 by poetandknowit 25-Sep-02/11:28 PM
I think she's calling you fat!
Re: WHY by adrenalize 25-Sep-02/10:53 PM
Because you'd rather cling to something imagined than move on and make a future? Really people. Is this the bleeding hearts club?
Re: making progress (a piece of it) by Limness 25-Sep-02/10:51 PM
So what? Get over it.
Re: O Man Away From Me by Limness 25-Sep-02/10:50 PM
Indeed. But flesh makes a warmer one, as we both must know.
Re: 5 p.m. by cobalt 25-Sep-02/10:46 PM
If you would take the train, you'd avoid this mess. But then, would we have this poem?
Re: Velvetted by knickytoy 25-Sep-02/10:44 PM
He'll not be horny again dear.


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