Re: a comment on Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/11:23 PM
Me, yes. Him, no.
Re: Neophyte Bourgeoisie by EAger to Offend	24-Sep-03/11:21 PM
Yea, sometimes life is sweet, sometimes it's the extra's.(The deck, afternoon brunches, Lady McBeth?) Sometimes it's time alone.
Re: a comment on Leaving by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/11:07 PM
Fuckin' do it, Nentwined deales with alot of shit here. You're only 19, you can't top us.
Re: a comment on Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/11:04 PM
O.K. you need to answer my questions in order, so are you cute? (I'm a man, I have to ask, AGAIN)And why capitolize the H in him?
Re: a comment on Leaving by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:58 PM
It just feels like you have alot more to say but you're holding it back. Let it go, kick ass.
Re: Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:55 PM
Capitol H Him. Do you mean God? I'm sure not, so why capitolize "him" ?The beginning of each line in a poem should be cap'd.
Re: a comment on Leaving by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:50 PM
It's agood thing. You have alot to say, you just need to work on expression.
Re: An End to the Beginning by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:47 PM
You are still so young. Don't stress it. If it's not right, don't worry about it. Move on and don't look back.Life's too short to deal with assholes. Are you cute by the way? I'm a poet you know. Read some of mine. Tell me what you think. just click my name.
Re: Leaving by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:37 PM
Damn. Well, still some problems,(spelling/typo's) That,s why you read it before you submit. Iliked it better then the other, so 8.
Re: Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:34 PM
I don't know what to think for sure. Why all the Cap's? I see where youre going but I don't follow.
Re: Fall by Brittanyy	21-Sep-03/9:17 PM
Hmmm. It's easy to get lost in this, the first time you read it. The second time it seems easier to understand. It must be painful, not knowing. Only one R in buried. 9.
Re: Red by Brittanyy	21-Sep-03/9:12 PM
I love it, it has a certain melancholy ring of truth. 'It's so hard to see reality...' Yea, and you never really know what it's worth unless you've been on the other side of that fine line.Anyway, I enjoyed this one. 10.
Re: A Fractured Egg Shell by newdawnfades	18-Sep-03/9:05 PM
A note on life perhaps? Not yours I hope.
Re: Queen Of The Ring by baphomet	13-Sep-03/7:39 PM
O.K. something is wrong here. I can smell it (distant smell of ether.) But still waiting for the continuation, only because I want to know what happened to the queer guy, you know sillygoose. I hope the spread his entrails across three continents, That would make this an interesting read.
Re: Angelic Fornication by The_Third_Isis	13-Sep-03/7:30 PM
Well, what can I say. Hmm...She sounds really tasty, what with the socks, the skirt, etc. That alone deserves a 10.
Re: a comment on A Question of the Future by razorgrin	8-Sep-03/7:56 PM
Well, you see, she did leave a comment. Then she proceeded to give a zero without a comment. When it falls within a minute, it's fairly obvious. I know I rambled at the end, but 0's without comments really pissssssss me off. There are 1's and 2's etc. If you think a poem sucks bad enough to deserve a 0, then it must be the shittiest poem ever built. This one happened to have several 10's. So, are we to assume that razorgrin--No, let's not make assumptions. Would you care to read my last three posted? Thank you.
Re: a comment on Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge	8-Sep-03/7:45 PM
Come on Electro, your first attempt made the top 20. Considering all the pagans on this site SHEEEEIT.
Re: Something Lost, Something Gained by Irischer Junge	8-Sep-03/7:42 PM
I have to agree with nentwined, before you post a poem, read it aloud to yourself. You will find that the flow doesn't exist. Just read it to yourself and try again.
Re: A Question of the Future by razorgrin	8-Sep-03/7:37 PM
I didn't mean to bash your best bud, but I couldn,t think of anything else to rhyme with vote.
Re: A Question of the Future by razorgrin	8-Sep-03/7:32 PM
Here,s a 0 for the bitch in a tree For all the 0's she's given me I don't care for her her shit I have to say But when giving her 0's I don't go out of my way But now I'm playing the game she plays. She looks at the best of the poems here Then hands me 0's like she has no fear. It's not the content or the rhythm that gets her bent Or maybe it is How the FUCK would we know if she doesn't leave a comment. But that's just like our friend To leave the worst possible vote Like the poem could be written by her sex partner the goat.