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Red (Free verse) by Brittanyy building dreams on misinterpretations
digging a hole in this fragile heart
I'm lifting myself up just to watch myself come crashing down
it's so hard to see reality for what it's worth
living in a world where feeling is too easy
emotions rush forth so naturally
forgetting to supress what rises in me
why do I look for something to care for in somebody else
crawl away from these taunting disasters
let the storm roll over without interfering
maybe someday I can live with the truth
that lonliness is my only companion
Up the ladder:
The Bastard Earth
Down the ladder:
Lynched
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Posted: September 20, 2003 11:21 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2003 11:21 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2 Overall Rank: 4554 Comments:
OK, the sentiment of building dreams on interpretations and looking for something to care for in somebody else, at least attempts to explore.
the words are not necessarily poetic, and supress what rises in me is a bit kind of psychobabble, and loneliness my only companion has been used so many times before. But as I said it is OK, not bad even
I love it, it has a certain melancholy ring of truth.
'It's so hard to see reality...' Yea, and you never really know what it's worth unless you've been on the other side of that fine line.Anyway, I enjoyed this one. 10.
Whine whine whine. What, did you break a nail? Shitty rhythm, shitty cliched images and the self pity supplied the flies and stink lines.
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