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Leaving (Free verse) by Pervy Elf
To you this may mean nothing, but to me: Everything. I'm left aching for your presence, your touch, everytime you leave- Me. Leave me. For somebody other (better) than me. I hope you are happy. Happy with her. Beacuse this time; this time I'm going to leave- You. Leave you. For somebody other (better) than you. And this time; this time I'll finally be happy. Without you.

Up the ladder: Happy 29. a little late
Down the ladder: Penny Loafer Blues

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.4034123
Overall Rank: 3133
Posted: September 24, 2003 10:22 PM PDT; Last modified: September 24, 2003 10:22 PM PDT
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[8] sliver @ 63.190.81.194 | 24-Sep-03/10:37 PM | Reply
Damn. Well, still some problems,(spelling/typo's) That,s why you read it before you submit. Iliked it better then the other, so 8.
[n/a] Pervy Elf @ 152.163.253.38 > sliver | 24-Sep-03/10:46 PM | Reply
I see what you mean about the spelling...I never did very well in that area. But, what do you mean about 'Damn'? That's makes me kind of nervous...
[8] sliver @ 63.190.81.194 > Pervy Elf | 24-Sep-03/10:50 PM | Reply
It's agood thing. You have alot to say, you just need to work on expression.
[n/a] Pervy Elf @ 152.163.253.38 > sliver | 24-Sep-03/10:56 PM | Reply
Expression? How so?
[8] sliver @ 63.190.81.194 > Pervy Elf | 24-Sep-03/10:58 PM | Reply
It just feels like you have alot more to say but you're holding it back. Let it go, kick ass.
[n/a] Pervy Elf @ 152.163.253.38 > sliver | 24-Sep-03/11:03 PM | Reply
I don't think that I could post here if I held nothing back. It might, okay, it will get ugly. It's amazing how many expletives can be strung into one sentance. And directed at only one person, too. Hmm...^_~
[8] sliver @ 63.190.81.194 > Pervy Elf | 24-Sep-03/11:07 PM | Reply
Fuckin' do it, Nentwined deales with alot of shit here. You're only 19, you can't top us.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 > Pervy Elf | 25-Sep-03/12:18 PM | Reply
Wow, you must have so much burning rage and pure beautiful energy if you couldn't post without holding something back. It's obvious that the only thing you're holding back is a silly temper tantrum about your parents/boyfriend/best friend "betraying" you, so while you aren't going to offend anyone by posting it here, you'll just upset yourself in the long run when nobody fucking likes it. Thanks!

Your friend,
doug
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