Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/7:03 AM
Actually, I see that I'm going in three different directions here. Dealership, real estate and circus. I need to pick one. I'm trying to make it reflect my feeling toward our war with Iraq. Hussein,Bin laden , and bush. How did you know I like Mercs? Those lead sleds do it for me every time. Thanks, I should work this shouldn't I?
Re: On the Swings by Christof	17-Oct-02/5:41 AM
Swing away! If I shut up long enough, would you mentor me?
Re: Anti-Kinetic by anonymous	17-Oct-02/5:37 AM
Ok, I can't see any problems with this as is. I think you may be poetandknowit toying with me though. Either way I like this piece.9 if you're interested in the scoring
Re: Anti-Kinetic by anonymous	16-Oct-02/8:07 PM
Maybe I'm just warmin' up.
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	16-Oct-02/7:41 PM
Why thank you m'dear. I thought of drums but I figgered that to be to obvious, any other suggestions?
Re: Reptiles & Dust - Twenty-two through Forty-two by Wulf	16-Oct-02/6:51 PM
Some thing works here. But it is a very large circle you're drawing with it.
Re: How I Got Laid by liljsmith87	16-Oct-02/6:47 PM
No, ya got it wrong. This IS a place where you kiss and tell.
Re: The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness	16-Oct-02/6:44 PM
I dunno, this speaks to me of a prostitutes sadness towards her predicament...? Well written, I think.
Re: ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie	16-Oct-02/4:01 PM
Yup, works best when you do it that way.
Re: ending by Limness	16-Oct-02/3:50 PM
Screw the damn fortune, gimme the cookie! 9 for your gentle opening of the baked flower.
Re: Bowed by <~>	15-Oct-02/11:51 AM
Maybe some day I'll be able to graciously flow the pain of romance the way you two ladies do. Until then, I will be happy watching the pros.9
Re: Warmth Amidst Winter by loneshadow29	14-Oct-02/5:36 PM
I like the transition from sadness to happiness.Um, your still telling,not showing. Instead of using a season directly(winter), try being more specific. I.E. Compare your feeling of sorrow to a frozen lake. Compare your happiness to the smoldering coals of a fire not yet fully extinguished. You want your feeling to be worse (or better) than anyone elses, so exaggerate the feeling, this helps grab your audience. Did you knock a knuckle on the counter? Then make it sound as if you slammed your hand in a friggin CAR DOOR! See the diff? Keep going, you're gaining on it.6 I'm gonna make you work for it.
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	14-Oct-02/4:44 PM
I have to agree, enjoyably gross! Absolute artsy fartsy shit! Hard to think I could learn from this,but.....
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/4:33 PM
Happy birthing!,then.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/4:29 PM
You seem to enjoy ripping others poetry to get them to rip you back. Trying to draw people out n stuff. You like playfull and slightly mean verbal jousting. Am I wrong? If so, please define your humor for me so I don't go round assuming the wrong things.
Re: a comment on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT	14-Oct-02/4:17 PM
My dittos exactly.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/9:30 AM
You're a riot Z. And I'm starting to see Dark Angels humor too. Thanks for the vote of confidence;)
Re: Few Words by Tom Colebrooke	14-Oct-02/9:25 AM
All three are quite enjoyable. You like bees, and honey. Sounds like you like women. You have humor, very important. Thanks for the laugh,welcome,enjoy!888
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/9:12 AM
Sorry P&K, are you referring to this piece being a baby or me? I'd hoped my level was above "baby", but then my emotions some times suggest otherwise. "One country" seems far from being a baby. OY! I talk too much.
Re: a comment on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT	14-Oct-02/9:04 AM
I believe GANDHI was to a degree, a poet. He led an army of people to fight without physical violence. I was going for "fun' not goofy. Could you recommend some reading that may help me improve my skills?