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Free verse № 20803

Anti-Kinetic

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Oct 2002 · 6 comments

The most difficult dilemma: Knowing what you're capable of and... Watching yourself crumble over the potential There must have been something great in a black hole Some power, some force, some strength Something so amazing, that the universe couldn't hold it Something that rushed chills up and down your spine Bent your hairs to erection Something so awesome, immaculate, and huge... That something must have rested upon me A divine presence left a divine absence My skill, the discipline...vacuumed Progress equals regression Attempts equal failure "If at first you don't succeed, TRY and TRY again." Venimous advice, poisonous cliche Don't try, DO it! Don't attempt, succeed! If at first you don't succeed, It was because you only tried at first "At least I tried," said the failure.

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6 comments

[9] INTRANSIT 16-Oct-02/8:07 PM Reply
Maybe I'm just warmin' up.
[n/a] anonymous › INTRANSIT 16-Oct-02/10:30 PM Reply
You wouldn't happen to have a constructive sentence to bless me with.
[9] INTRANSIT 17-Oct-02/5:37 AM Reply
Ok, I can't see any problems with this as is. I think you may be poetandknowit toying with me though. Either way I like this piece.9 if you're interested in the scoring
[n/a] anonymous › INTRANSIT 17-Oct-02/11:19 AM Reply
No, i'm not poetandknowit. I'm new. My first scores weren't the best, to say the least.
[7] Christof 18-Oct-02/7:48 AM Reply
There's a hint of Yoda in the final 5 or 6 lines - are you a Jedi?
[n/a] anonymous › Christof 18-Oct-02/11:52 AM Reply
As a matter of fiction, I am.