Re: Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8	21-Oct-02/7:34 AM
Jagged, endless possibilities, and WIERD to say the least. You are strange. "Everyones strange, when you're a stranger"...7 because I pulled little from it. Probably me.
Re: a comment on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT	21-Oct-02/7:25 AM
Ok Dark Angel, I'm listening.
Re: nothing could by nentwined	21-Oct-02/6:06 AM
Good! I was worried about you, scared you had'nt seen the light of day for months! HA! you're alive! It is a deep cyberworld indeed. Please do not let it suck the marrow from your being and leave you a hallowed keyboard stroker. 8 for your dead end:)
Re: a comment on Faith by INTRANSIT	21-Oct-02/6:01 AM
Thanks for showing me how to add class to this, does the adjustment work?
Re: a comment on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT	21-Oct-02/5:58 AM
Thanks Cristof, I have 30 of these darn things right now and have no clue what to do with them. Not to mention I can crank these out all day long. It wasn't meant to be a poem, just oneliners. If you've got an idea, I'm all eyes.
Re: a comment on One liners for the ladies by INTRANSIT	20-Oct-02/7:43 PM
I guess people some times forget that love can be found anywhere, not just in the bedroom. Thanks.
Re: this tuesday morning by teacup	20-Oct-02/3:04 PM
I like all three, but I'm a little confused about"fruit punch". How long does it take the sun to set in Oregon on I-5 in the summer?6
Re: Premarital Sex (Zombie Fantasy) by Sigh'ense...	20-Oct-02/2:58 PM
Not that I know a whole lot about poetry, my reccomendations are: Delete "penetration" and "ejaculation" I think less is more with this work. I also think you can say the same thing and get the same result with half the material. Just my opinion. 6
Re: Fact About the Wind by Ninoy_Instigator	19-Oct-02/9:54 AM
I like the way it souds like a breif time you two weree together, but how enjoyable the time was.
Re: On the Swings by Christof	18-Oct-02/4:36 PM
No curmudgeon could have written" Instructions to a sculpter". The only reason you have ex-girlfiends is because their glasses were dirty. Very diry indeed! Happy 29th approaching!
Re: Librarian by Tibbs	18-Oct-02/4:05 PM
Um, she must be aware of your presence if you can tell the color of her eyes.Also,1 down? One down her blouse maybe. Overall, very good. Not that I'm a pro or anything. 8 For your lady in uniform.
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	18-Oct-02/5:50 AM
Thanks for your help, is there any thing I could've done better? Also the "bears" is a stab at the stock market. I do see the bears as other bill collectors though. Gotta haul some cars for a while( ironically enough). Chat in a few days:)
Re: a comment on Char by Amelia	17-Oct-02/4:22 PM
Amalea May Juniper Berry! GET YOUR FANNY BACK IN HERE RIGHT THIS MOMENT YOUNG LADY! WE'RE NOT DONE WITH YOU YET!>O
Re: a comment on On the Swings by Christof	17-Oct-02/4:16 PM
Thanks for your help Christof, I really appreciate this. V2 is up and a hearty cup of Earl Grey to you:)
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/4:12 PM
Thanks ls29, it did need a facelift though. I hope it didn't lose anything. How're things going for you?
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/4:10 PM
Thanks for your comment zzinnia66. Iwent thataway and it seems to make more sense now. I promise never to ignore you again:) Capice?
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/4:08 PM
Well, she's no Walt Whitman, I think she's got some good stuff in her book though.
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/8:03 AM
Will do. I think I have a small flare for grandness and thats why my coffee thing worked. Shakespeare would fit. I'll try some of your reccomendations. I have a couple of mixed poetry books that give me a sample of many. As childish as it may seem, I would recommend: A night without armor by Jewel.
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/7:31 AM
Maybe 'twould be better if I went the capitalistic route? What/whose writing would you recommend I read? Thanks for the flowers.
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/7:18 AM
Holy shit C! Thanks for that completely alternate view. I was going to do capitalism at some point but it seems I glanced it here, I shall take your advice and apply my hammer to the steel. Thanks.