| Re: a comment on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
23-Feb-05/6:45 AM |
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What about lay'd and lade?
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| Re: Jack and Jill by Dovina |
23-Feb-05/6:42 AM |
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Didja see the lawyer show where the guy killed someone and the whole reason behind the ordeal was he didn't get a date from some chick. In the meantime he became muslim (extremist) because they supposedly believe women are inferior. It was funny. And scary.
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| Re: Hunger by Dovina |
21-Feb-05/5:40 AM |
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I can picture it . Since it happens so quickly, lose the commas.
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| Re: a comment on Rusty knife to the kidney by INTRANSIT |
19-Feb-05/7:39 AM |
When I thought of it, I laughed too. Then a Grinch like grin came over me. But is it poetry? Would Ezra Pound laugh at it?
Or would he laugh at it.
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| Re: If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm |
19-Feb-05/5:40 AM |
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Seems to get rolling, then stalls. Encore? Maybe check the definition of nihilist. I'm not sure.
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| Re: a comment on Summing Up by Dovina |
19-Feb-05/5:17 AM |
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Or just alter it a little. The major part suggests he's dead. The minor suggests he went to another woman. Wha'd you get?
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| Re: Brother's Egg Book by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
19-Feb-05/5:15 AM |
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Something tells me this is a one-timer, pure. I'd leave it if it is.
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| Re: a comment on Garage sale by INTRANSIT |
18-Feb-05/6:34 AM |
Yes I did get your e-mail. Thank you. I'll hang on to it for future refrence should I look to try something different again.
How do I do it? Dunno really. Sometimes a picture pops into my head, possibly driven by whatever mood I'm in at the time, and I grab pen, scribble notes, and when I have more time I get out the curling iron, and brushes.
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| Re: a comment on Garage sale by INTRANSIT |
18-Feb-05/6:30 AM |
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No I don't suppose I need to draw a line along the boundary of sex considering it is such an old boundary. Avarice in fifty cents? Possibly. If your intention is do dispose of the ants and keep the rest. This doesn't sound like your style, D. As far as arrogance is concerned, I think it has little to do with writing good poetry. Thanks for the vote of confidence though.
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| Re: a comment on Garage sale by INTRANSIT |
17-Feb-05/5:39 AM |
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As ususal. Women doing what they can to save the planet. Men and their deadly avarice. Ha!
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| Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee |
16-Feb-05/3:35 PM |
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| Re: Little Fly by PodPoet |
16-Feb-05/3:04 PM |
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| Re: A Sinnerâs Prayer by Dovina |
16-Feb-05/2:59 PM |
Howdy, D. Nice beat here. A serious answer to your question of why I left: I think my poetry sucks. No kidding. I'm just not measuring up to what I expect of myself. And now back to our regularly scheduled silliness:
I left because, in high school, I didn't get the safety program that went:
Bill got mixed up with the wrong internet crowd.
He wants to try poetry.
Careful, Bill, it's difficult.
No, Bill, you can't spondee! You'll hurt yourself!
Too bad for Bill.
No, I get the one: Bill wants to try Rachmaninoff.
Ok. I didn't get that one, but I did get the one that goes:
Bill wants to try Air-traffic-control.
Well, you can see where that led to.
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| Re: I Have... by SupremeDreamer |
12-Dec-04/12:04 PM |
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At least they're talking to you. Either I've gone so horribly off track that no lifeline can reach, or I'm so accurate now no one can complain. I'm leaning on the former. Can I borrow some dope?
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| Re: a comment on Digging by Dovina |
7-Dec-04/6:53 PM |
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No. but you can still make this better. I think the rythm does work for it. I've given up on I/P. At least until I get my grammar right.
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| Re: a comment on Digging by Dovina |
7-Dec-04/4:38 PM |
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yeah! and if you can keep it nine lines long, that would rule!!
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| Re: Digging by Dovina |
7-Dec-04/4:07 PM |
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I think -diggables- demeans the rest of the poem. Just for fun, You might use the mild rhyme and the beat from "of brimstone hot and water cold" ,patterning it that way.
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| Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined |
7-Dec-04/3:21 PM |
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My wife just gave me an early birthday gift. A 1907 publishing of: Tennyson- Day by Day. I would suggest leaving "group" and indulging until your mind is bulging. I'm gong to slap myself now.
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| Re: Recognition by nentwined |
7-Dec-04/10:09 AM |
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No amount of nonsensical smut -filled commenting could ever bring this poem down.
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| Re: Kaleidoscopic (Re-Edit) by Sasha |
7-Dec-04/9:12 AM |
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