Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	9-Mar-05/7:34 PM
Ultimately the idea is plum freedom. A hot walk is a determined walk, he has someplace to go but there's the fence issue. The games are very limited . Ball on the end of a rope. Four squares (walls). I'll save the other words. I may need them later.;/
Re: a comment on genious by the_poetess	9-Mar-05/2:09 PM
Us -truth seekers-, sometimes we run into a problem with our poetry when we want to say something and the urge to just ,um, archer?- the point overrides the tools used to create poetry. I find myself forcing obfuscation and declarification to "hide" what I'm saying and It's a Royal Paine-Diaz sometimes. Do you agree?
Re: a comment on knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	9-Mar-05/2:04 PM
Just more poetry, please. Yeah, the whole portently /portentously thing has me bugged. Hot walk bugs you eh? How 'bout the lady with the chainsaw. Think she might let me use it to alter this?
Re: knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	9-Mar-05/1:05 PM
Unless you're me in which case a stiff wind blew all my seeds out to sea and i'm just wilting now. Always good when you -ain't skeered. write more damnit.
Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33	9-Mar-05/1:02 PM
burger, fries, shake, should all be the las words in each stanza. Put THAT in your cherry pie.
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	9-Mar-05/12:55 PM
Well guys, here's the deal. I tried to find another word altogether, but I didn't find anything I liked. I went with portentously because I went back to the dictionary and decided this was the best solution. Anything else that bugs you? Feel free to drop the hammer.
Re: Today, last year was on a Sunday by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-Mar-05/7:30 PM
Easy day. These things usually drag on for months. Who the hell is Devilbuni?
Re: genious by the_poetess	8-Mar-05/7:23 PM
Are you a Saggitarius?
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	8-Mar-05/7:19 PM
Well, while poets are farmer-like in some respects, I was thinking about road tractors. The Idea was spawned from a dump trucks brakes, but that seems too wordy and interrupts what little rhythm I have here.
Re: Beetwen by Dovina	8-Mar-05/2:04 PM
10 for the difficulty in intentionally fucking the spelling up.
Re: Pilgrim by richa	8-Mar-05/1:48 PM
richa. you posted. how wierd. the crust reference makes me grin.
Re: a comment on a note to the politically inactive fundamentalist christians by i_am_the_popsicle	7-Mar-05/1:32 PM
One name: Bono. and I aint talkin' Sonny.
Re: Homecoming Parade by wilco	28-Feb-05/6:14 AM
I like it too. another kind of parade might make me happier. unless it's supposed to carry the undertones of war. Say, any relation to the "band" wilco?
Re: Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro	26-Feb-05/6:43 AM
it's good to get this out of your system, but... http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=37680
Re: a comment on It’s the Management by Dovina	26-Feb-05/6:41 AM
yes maam. gonna post a comment on alfies poem. Introduce an old poet. You might find it helpful. I still go here sometimes.
Re: It’s the Management by Dovina	26-Feb-05/6:30 AM
G'mornin, D.
Re: Last Time by DevilBuni	26-Feb-05/6:28 AM
A: Heat? Heart-line 7 B: We already have a pinkfluffybunnyrabbitofdoom. no kidding. C: You're 21. I hope you've had some life experiences by now that you can tap into. This poem is too simple. D: Case in point, line 3 rewrite: All I see in his eyes is a reflection of myself. OR His blue m and m eyes with ms' too large to see through. Telling vs showing. look around for an image. Read everything. Everything!!! My motorcycle pants are called barrier pants. I saw the label as I was sitting on the toilet. I may use this in apoem some time. Again, Read EVERYTHING! billboards magazines pillbottle labels. There are images and poetic symbols and stuff all over the place. We don't just think out of the box at p/r. We shredded our boxes then burned them and used the ashed to feed our Begonias. Poetry isn't just about feelings, it's about finding NEW ways to express what we feel. Be creative. Be absurd Go nuts.
Re: It’s the Management by Dovina	25-Feb-05/6:44 AM
Boss.
Re: Corner Shop, 5 Quinton Road by Caducus	25-Feb-05/6:41 AM
Well, you sent me to the dictionary. 3 points. I'm okay with girning and cantering, damson is a reach. 2 points. The construction is overall solid. 2 points. The puntuation is good,somethings fishy about the opening line. Maybe a bit run on. It's also visually well balanced. 2 points. It's definitely worth "finishing".
Re: a comment on Jack and Jill by Dovina	23-Feb-05/1:29 PM
You! Frumious Bandersnatch! Unhand that Gwynyth, Paltrow! Socket yourself, man. and prepare for the Calvin and Hobbes dance.