poemranker ::20 most recent comments by INTRANSIT (441-460) and replies

Comments byINTRANSIT, 441–460 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 28 May 2005, 8:10 PM
Originally, It wasn't meant to be a posting but to be tossed between them during. Zodiac hadn't been around in a while so I chunked it out here because, at the moment, I have nothing (I) feel is worthy of efforting. Maybe it'll bloom. Maybe not.
on The secret press by zodiac 28 May 2005, 7:59 PM
Because Beta usually follows alpha or precedes -max, I have problem here. If it is an actual name for fact keeping purposes, then ignore this. When you said navel I thought she might be pregnant which would have worked as well but I didn't write it and there's nothing wrong with your choice.
If I was female, I'd be wrung. Metrics all the way.
replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 26 May 2005, 7:14 PM
No I prefer the big rubber Dinosaurs with the squeeker located smack where the ... OH MY GAWD! I'M OUTTA CONTROL! Uno mas? Por favor?
replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 26 May 2005, 7:10 PM
Emergency Nudicle Technician?
replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 26 May 2005, 7:07 PM
Which one?
replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 26 May 2005, 7:02 PM
Dunno. Like 'im though. And 'mage and anyone who'll whip me like the bad poet I am. I'm a maso-chiste.
replying on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT 26 May 2005, 6:57 PM
It's just some junk I thought up on the road after seein one of the many "discussions" between you and Zodiac. You can flog me with a squeaky toy. If that's your thing.
replying on Coffined by Dovina 26 May 2005, 6:53 PM
Neither does poetry if you think about it.

"If a nation's literature declines,the nation atrophies and decays."
Ezra Pound from A-B-C of reading

Yes. Pound. Again.
on Welcome To Croatia by Caducus 26 May 2005, 1:19 PM
"Where'd you go, Psycho-boy?"
"I felt like destroying something beautiful."
on Coffined by Dovina 26 May 2005, 1:10 PM
Sorry D, I was left in the dark on this one.

But I do need to ask if maybe Rockmage compensates for my mostly over generous votes, thereby giving the 'ranker SOME balance?
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26 May 2005, 12:34 PM
This is NOT the recipe for pumkin fritata? Damn.
on Yesterdays testament by Caducus 26 May 2005, 7:55 AM
You read Plath? holy cow. I'd better give her a once over at least.
on Star Studded Supermarket by [mojo] 26 May 2005, 6:30 AM
This is funny and worth the effort to iron out. My first thoughts are: lose stanza 10, the clouds. and go with the four line stanzas. Really! Do this ! Or else!
on Swoon by Dovina 25 May 2005, 3:17 PM
Well, I can't say that I could write romantic poetry near as well, as I'm from the "other side of the tracks".

Thank god I wear a tea cozy. And I ordered a new one in Naugahyde , with a sea-shell veil. That's right. Surf and turf headwear.
on The Jesus Belt by Caducus 25 May 2005, 2:53 PM
I like this but I feel like a dunce for not knowing who "she" -is. Honestly I think the psuedo-rhyme hurts it.
on Finding Gin and Santa by richa 25 May 2005, 2:48 PM
I forgot to come back to this. I'm waggin'!
on Untitled by camperdfl 25 May 2005, 2:43 PM
Make the punch-line punchier. Otherwise, a good way to practice the damnable sonnet.
on From Hell, a Vilanelle by horus8 25 May 2005, 7:32 AM
Too funny!
replying on Rock of the Earth by ingwa 24 May 2005, 11:44 AM
The point of diminishing returns is quite the hangnail.
replying on Rock of the Earth by ingwa 23 May 2005, 11:26 AM
Listen. That's the secret to writing good rhythmic poetry. Read it aloud to yourself as if you were reading to an audience. Every hiccup will show. Make a mark or reword the line. Sometimes shuffling the lines helps the beat and the logic too.
I've rewritten poems 5 times before posting, no joke. Patience. Listen. That's all it takes.