Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	28-May-05/8:10 PM
Originally, It wasn't meant to be a posting but to be tossed between them during. Zodiac hadn't been around in a while so I chunked it out here because, at the moment, I have nothing (I) feel is worthy of efforting. Maybe it'll bloom. Maybe not.
Re: The secret press by zodiac	28-May-05/7:59 PM
Because Beta usually follows alpha or precedes -max, I have problem here. If it is an actual name for fact keeping purposes, then ignore this. When you said navel I thought she might be pregnant which would have worked as well but I didn't write it and there's nothing wrong with your choice. If I was female, I'd be wrung. Metrics all the way.
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	26-May-05/7:14 PM
No I prefer the big rubber Dinosaurs with the squeeker located smack where the ... OH MY GAWD! I'M OUTTA CONTROL! Uno mas? Por favor?
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	26-May-05/7:10 PM
Emergency Nudicle Technician?
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	26-May-05/7:07 PM
Which one?
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	26-May-05/7:02 PM
Dunno. Like 'im though. And 'mage and anyone who'll whip me like the bad poet I am. I'm a maso-chiste.
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	26-May-05/6:57 PM
It's just some junk I thought up on the road after seein one of the many "discussions" between you and Zodiac. You can flog me with a squeaky toy. If that's your thing.
Re: a comment on Coffined by Dovina	26-May-05/6:53 PM
Neither does poetry if you think about it. "If a nation's literature declines,the nation atrophies and decays." Ezra Pound from A-B-C of reading Yes. Pound. Again.
Re: Welcome To Croatia by Caducus	26-May-05/1:19 PM
"Where'd you go, Psycho-boy?" "I felt like destroying something beautiful."
Re: Coffined by Dovina	26-May-05/1:10 PM
Sorry D, I was left in the dark on this one. But I do need to ask if maybe Rockmage compensates for my mostly over generous votes, thereby giving the 'ranker SOME balance?
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	26-May-05/12:34 PM
This is NOT the recipe for pumkin fritata? Damn.
Re: Yesterdays testament by Caducus	26-May-05/7:55 AM
You read Plath? holy cow. I'd better give her a once over at least.
Re: Star Studded Supermarket by [mojo]	26-May-05/6:30 AM
This is funny and worth the effort to iron out. My first thoughts are: lose stanza 10, the clouds. and go with the four line stanzas. Really! Do this ! Or else!
Re: Swoon by Dovina	25-May-05/3:17 PM
Well, I can't say that I could write romantic poetry near as well, as I'm from the "other side of the tracks". Thank god I wear a tea cozy. And I ordered a new one in Naugahyde , with a sea-shell veil. That's right. Surf and turf headwear.
Re: The Jesus Belt by Caducus	25-May-05/2:53 PM
I like this but I feel like a dunce for not knowing who "she" -is. Honestly I think the psuedo-rhyme hurts it.
Re: Finding Gin and Santa by richa	25-May-05/2:48 PM
I forgot to come back to this. I'm waggin'!
Re: Untitled by camperdfl	25-May-05/2:43 PM
Make the punch-line punchier. Otherwise, a good way to practice the damnable sonnet.
Re: From Hell, a Vilanelle by horus8	25-May-05/7:32 AM
Too funny!
Re: a comment on Rock of the Earth by ingwa	24-May-05/11:44 AM
The point of diminishing returns is quite the hangnail.
Re: a comment on Rock of the Earth by ingwa	23-May-05/11:26 AM
Listen. That's the secret to writing good rhythmic poetry. Read it aloud to yourself as if you were reading to an audience. Every hiccup will show. Make a mark or reword the line. Sometimes shuffling the lines helps the beat and the logic too. I've rewritten poems 5 times before posting, no joke. Patience. Listen. That's all it takes.