| Re: The last Smurf standing by Bachus |
15-Aug-03/5:02 PM |
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Ok you baaaaad boy. But no more freebies!
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| Re: First Love by Mr Pig |
15-Aug-03/8:35 PM |
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From kindergarten until mid-high, I hung on any piece of info that she might come back. She never did. I never will.
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| Re: Icecream Soul by LuckyJoe |
15-Aug-03/8:36 PM |
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good metaphor. needs chutzpah.
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| Re: drought on talkin river by richa |
16-Aug-03/5:34 PM |
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definitely better. i never quite make the jump from 2 to 3 though. holding score.
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| Re: Malaries by horus8 |
16-Aug-03/5:46 PM |
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Like mine, this deserves a better title. do it. because I know you can.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Aug-03/6:02 AM |
I think the nonsensical part is just over the line. taper it in a little. keep the street slang. I like the way it starts and changes to "poetry" at the end.
lose the (eeeeffff) line, replace it with something rhyming and silly.
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| Re: Malaries by horus8 |
17-Aug-03/6:10 AM |
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Yes! How can p/k say your poetry is going nowhere? Honestly, I may not understand most of what you are writing, but you have no boxes. no boundaries. no rules. this is what makes you work. once people get past the wrought iron gates, you're an amusement park with the best rides. always worth the price of admittance.
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| Re: The makings of a killer by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
17-Aug-03/6:15 AM |
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Are you already in Lompoc? Did e-mode put you there? bastards.
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| Re: drought on talkin river by richa |
17-Aug-03/6:17 AM |
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| Re: missing time (revised) by Bill Z Bub |
17-Aug-03/4:58 PM |
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I like the randomly shifted lines better. Dropping the buttercup works! I don't know what perfect is, but I can't imagine it being better than this. you piss me off.
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| Re: Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent |
17-Aug-03/5:17 PM |
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I'll come back. First read looks pretty good.
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| Re: the secret life of eyebrows by Bill Z Bub |
17-Aug-03/8:14 PM |
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If there's a best poet (overall) award for this site, I'd vote for you. eyebrows, HA! whodathunk.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Aug-03/6:57 PM |
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I liked it and should have said so sooner. I also got it , except I wasn't led to believe the screen was blank. I dunno. Isn't it (nentwined) to the east? Or is it west? Where is the nentwined system, anyway?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Aug-03/5:45 AM |
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whew. that's a serious piece of poetry there.
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| Re: August and everyt'ing after by w~* ATHENA *~w |
19-Aug-03/5:47 AM |
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Your style is definitely one-off. maybe two. I need more lines to "clue me in".
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| Re: August and everyt'ing after by w~* ATHENA *~w |
19-Aug-03/6:17 AM |
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Also, if your appetite is insatiable, why not write more?
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| Re: quarter-step (abridged) by richa |
23-Aug-03/7:42 AM |
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This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
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| Re: quarter-step (abridged) by richa |
23-Aug-03/7:42 AM |
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This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
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| Re: POEMRANKER HAT - WHERES MY FREE MUG BITCH? by Don-Quixote |
25-Aug-03/5:13 PM |
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You have quelled my grumpiness for the day. Thank you.
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| Re: The Better of the Sea by abecedarian |
25-Aug-03/5:20 PM |
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I hate people who write sailing verse better than I. Grrr. I pray... I pray..... something nasty and including a great white whale. I think I've just poxed myself.lol
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