Re: a comment on Missing - You by Skamper	26-Nov-07/10:37 PM
ah! that's because you would need to look at typo.com no matter how many times you read and re-read to make sure its all OK, sometimes a typo so obvious just fails to be noticed. Must be the mind telling the eye it's wrong...many thanks.
Re: a comment on In the berth by INTRANSIT	26-Nov-07/6:16 PM
the 'cat' gives a two fold image...you need to keep that in. I like the image... :) Not usually a favourite of mine - the 'sound effects' but you played it well
Re: Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT	26-Nov-07/6:10 PM
Nicely portrayed - the one-way relationship, never to be relayed any other way.
Re: Stringed by thetrev	26-Nov-07/5:49 PM
OH! this is weird, I like what each line and verse is saying but find the overall connection escaping me.
Re: The Dung Beetles by Pappa	26-Nov-07/5:45 PM
this is too complicated for me - the structure I can't even begin to appreciate, but the lesson in nature could do with something...not sure what that could be but the last line seems text bookish, rather than poetic... can you show me where i might find other Englyn?
Re: Heroes to the End by sliver	26-Nov-07/5:40 PM
line 4 - vowed to see its' end, and took vows to see its' end, and vowed to see it's end..'it' and 'it's' is a little too much line 5 - drop the red, blood holds the colour you need Very poignant :)
Re: Again with the venting by hobojo	26-Nov-07/5:28 PM
I do love a good vent/rant...whether at a person or an ideal stage we strive to achieve... and I do like this there are a few places I would tighten up a little, give more oomph to the structure. for instance... I used to think life would make sense - one day all my efforts would pay off and all my terror - end and I'd coast for a little while I thought, if I kept fighting kept holding on I would make it that I would leave it all behind
Re: a comment on AKA Poets by Skamper	26-Nov-07/5:16 PM
I know - he's a clever bugger... I spent hours and hours reading An Absolutely Ordinary Rainbow. Not heard of Ted Kooser...another one for google...thanks. :)
Re: a comment on A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper	26-Nov-07/5:12 PM
lol...stay well clear when the signs present... I think this is a US site, not sure tho
Re: a comment on A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper	26-Nov-07/5:10 PM
thanks Paul - I have been toying with writing something like this for a while
Re: a comment on A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper	26-Nov-07/5:08 PM
point me in the direction - or repost, would like to read that.
Re: Bottle collection by INTRANSIT	22-Nov-07/1:05 PM
I've just finished a book where the husband was a bottle collector - he had loads of them, proudly displayed and affectionately restored...at the end of the book the wife smashed every one of them. Not that this has anything to do with your poem, apart from coincidence to me... This poem is perfect in it's quiet way, love it.
Re: a comment on AKA Poets by Skamper	22-Nov-07/12:58 PM
I am currently reading unknown poets on various sites (hence this write). I like Les Murray, australian poet - If you can read, An Absolutely Ordinary Rainbow, I think you would enjoy it.
Re: a comment on A Cyclamatic Word of Advice by Skamper	21-Nov-07/1:13 AM
thanks again...your input is appreciated and I dropped the 'maybe' don't know why I added it, cos there's no maybe about it. relying way too much on images to speak for you - isn't that what we do, draw the image in words?
Re: a comment on GENTLE JANE by titan69	21-Nov-07/1:08 AM
the scenario or the writing of it?
Re: a comment on The Taking by Skamper	21-Nov-07/1:06 AM
the 'fight' was only token resistence. I dropped the ... you were right they don't do anything many thanks :)
Re: What the fuck is a HAIKU anyway? by titan69	19-Nov-07/7:51 PM
drop the yoda instructions - add 'a' between writes and load... you definately have a way with....titles...
Re: What bianca saw!!! by titan69	19-Nov-07/7:48 PM
argh! get the sylable count right - if you are going to write in limerick, find the rhythm... snaps for the ranker/wanker rhyme
Re: GENTLE JANE by titan69	19-Nov-07/7:45 PM
this could have been funny...nah...who am I kidding, it's god awful
Re: Fading Love by hobojo	19-Nov-07/7:41 PM
line 4 first stanza - all that I despise - that which I despise...something like that to rid the repitition of 'what I' just an observation...like this a lot though, the inevitibility of it. :)