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The Dung Beetles (Free verse) by Pappa The dung beetles; they settle, they sit 'til
spring at last dawns and warms day;
adults appear from pupae.
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Posted: November 23, 2007 2:57 AM PST; Last modified: November 23, 2007 2:57 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.1422777 Overall Rank: 5496 Comments:
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23-Nov-07/2:59 AM
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This is actually an Englyn, not free verse.
Ok. So I'm making a connection between dung beetles and humans, but not much else. What is the technical description of an Englyn? Welcome to Das 'Ranker!
It's complicated, but imagine a haiku with the additional constraints of rhyme (7th, 8th or 9th syllable of the 1st line rhyming with the last syllables of the 2nd and 3rd lines). Plus various types of consonant or vowel harmonies (repeating patterns of consonants, vowels and rhymes) within each line. This second aspect is called cynghanedd, and the poem contains three forms of cynghanedd; cynghanedd sain on line 1, cynghanedd lusg on line 2 and cynghanedd draws on line 3.
Aside from the strict technical aspects, the poem is meant as a direct appreciation of nature, intentionally using an unusual subject (dung beetles) which are not normally seen as things of beauty or wonder. Pappa ps. Thanks for the welcome.
this is too complicated for me - the structure I can't even begin to appreciate, but the lesson in nature could do with something...not sure what that could be but the last line seems text bookish, rather than poetic...
can you show me where i might find other Englyn?
Not a lot have been written in the English language, but you'll find a few via:
http://www.google.com/search?q=english+e Thanks for the comments too. There is a problem with the last line, but I'm not too sure how to change it. Pappa 168 view(s)
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