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A Cyclamatic Word of Advice (Free verse) by Skamper
ask another stupid question yes there is such a thing it's here now resplendant on your tongue stop telling me it's natural as if the bleeding and the breathing are one and the same you missed the right to sympathize in the alphabetical shuffle of sexual determination just pass me a: towel smoke paracetemol and leave me to: dry sleep self indulge at this moment you are denied existence in any station other than servitude 'til the healing when I'll forgive you

Up the ladder: buk has a piss
Down the ladder: desire is the constant

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.75
Weighted score: 5.566214
Overall Rank: 2438
Posted: November 19, 2007 8:45 PM PST; Last modified: November 21, 2007 1:10 AM PST
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[10] INTRANSIT @ 69.23.157.197 | 20-Nov-07/8:02 AM | Reply
Cyclamatic ? Wow. There's a word. Say, is it just me, or do I rely way too much on images to do my speaking for me?

This is really good Skamper. Not sure about that -maybe-.
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.110.24 > INTRANSIT | 21-Nov-07/1:13 AM | Reply
thanks again...your input is appreciated and I dropped the 'maybe' don't know why I added it, cos there's no maybe about it.

relying way too much on images to speak for you - isn't that what we do, draw the image in words?
[10] INTRANSIT @ 69.23.157.197 | 21-Nov-07/6:18 AM | Reply
This reminds me of one I wrote where a woman gives back an engagement ring. And his rib.
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.191.64 > INTRANSIT | 26-Nov-07/5:08 PM | Reply
point me in the direction - or repost, would like to read that.
[10] deleted user @ 63.127.193.79 | 22-Nov-07/5:25 AM | Reply
Great stuff skamper--the first stanza really sets the tone for the rest of the poem. Nice work.
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.208.36 > deleted user | 26-Nov-07/5:10 PM | Reply
thanks Paul - I have been toying with writing something like this for a while
[10] malpaso @ 70.233.136.151 | 22-Nov-07/1:22 PM | Reply
I would hate to be the one on the other end of THAT laser. Hey is this website in the UK?
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.177.185 > malpaso | 26-Nov-07/5:12 PM | Reply
lol...stay well clear when the signs present... I think this is a US site, not sure tho
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