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9-Sep-06/2:50 PM |
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I like the words. A bit too easy though.
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| Re: End of day poem by ecargo |
9-Sep-06/2:59 PM |
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The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.
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9-Sep-06/3:27 PM |
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You're missing the point. Don't talk about the drugs. Let them inspire you.
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| Re: Flour by MacFrantic |
10-Sep-06/5:08 PM |
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I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.
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| Re: Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
15-Sep-06/10:29 PM |
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I dont particularly like God poems. But this one is good. It reads better if you get rid of "would I call on him" and "quenching" and "torrents of love and grace" IMHO
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| Re: Morning Glory by moyah8 |
15-Sep-06/10:35 PM |
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15-Sep-06/10:38 PM |
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| Re: Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina |
15-Sep-06/10:42 PM |
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| Re: Satyr by ecargo |
15-Sep-06/10:48 PM |
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| Re: The Red Chain by MacFrantic |
16-Sep-06/2:24 PM |
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Did I miss something in the first line? A missing word or I just don't understand enough to accept it. Second stanza; elegant, chilling.
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| Re: weather poem part 7: a short, sudden gust by nypoet22 |
17-Sep-06/12:15 PM |
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I think you mean "whether" in the last line.
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19-Sep-06/9:32 PM |
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20-Sep-06/8:46 PM |
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| Re: I Have, Because I Am by flock |
20-Sep-06/8:55 PM |
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I kind of liked the first few stanzas, but it just got worse as it went on, and then worse again until the final cliche ruined it entirely.
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| Re: Soup Can by oneglove |
22-Sep-06/8:25 PM |
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I like a bit more complexity.
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| Re: Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) by Ranger |
22-Sep-06/8:32 PM |
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I like some of the imagery..."solar flowers" "a million beating fists" "screaming slaves in chain gang rows", but they just don't string together that well for me.
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| Re: fear by BrendanElder |
29-Sep-06/12:04 AM |
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I can feel it coming from you heart. Beautiful.
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30-Sep-06/8:18 PM |
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I'm taking notes. Beautiful.
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| Re: "Twee" by Ranger |
30-Sep-06/8:19 PM |
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| Re: the secret life of the sundew by pollywolly |
30-Sep-06/8:29 PM |
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