| Re: Butterfly Belly, Orchid Face by Sunny |
24-Mar-06/12:43 PM |
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I agree that the ( ) break the flow of this, but otherwise, it's a gem! Many visuals and consistent flood of colors.
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| Re: Revised Dream (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20 |
24-Mar-06/2:07 PM |
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What pulls me into this poem is the repetition ~ it does sound prayer-like. I agree with Ranger that a positive based poem is refreshing.
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| Re: The Best Thing I Ever Had by faithmairee |
24-Mar-06/2:22 PM |
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I have a tender spot for Louisiana and this poem means all the more since Katrina. Enjoyed the southern, sultry feel..
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| Re: I sat beside the night by Niphredil |
24-Mar-06/2:31 PM |
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This is absolutely lovely! Night has a certain charm that makes one breath a little easier and you captured it well.
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24-Mar-06/2:41 PM |
"I wove it through the trees above"
Yes, indeed, this made the poem. Clever visual.
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| Re: I Remembered, Upon Waking by Alizarin_Crimson |
24-Mar-06/2:56 PM |
A haunting quality to knowing the depth of oneself. Very much enjoyed the eerie feel and then wishing never to have known...
(I was drawn to your poetry from your user name, it's a lovely color)
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| Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
24-Mar-06/3:01 PM |
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Mmmm hmmm... dosh it is... I love to paint and the picture comes to life with the brushstrokes of your words. Paint on.
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| Re: Elopement by Sasha |
24-Mar-06/4:09 PM |
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This has the feeling of Caribbean ocean coolness, quenching the heat of sandy shores. Very niceâ¦
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| Re: Office Worker angst by Adriaan |
24-Mar-06/5:04 PM |
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Terse fits because it's a feeling that time has been lost, where did it go, how could it be wasted.... Daily hum drum of life and will you look back with regrets. Enjoyed this.
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| Re: Pledge by http://mulberryfairy |
26-Mar-06/9:39 AM |
I found this poem quite fascinating ~ to watch the âmeâ and âIâ disappear, finding a hollow place to hide the emotions and personal experiences.
Also enjoyed reading your response ~ one of my majors back in college years was sociology and I considered the field⦠but part of what you wrote, the secondary traumatic stress disorder ~ it does take a thick skin and a special person to not internalize the abuse, yet be there for the person. Kudos to you for your chosen career.
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| Re: First Snow by http://mulberryfairy |
26-Mar-06/9:54 AM |
I've only seen snow a couple of times in my life, when I visited cousins in Maryland and a ski trip in Colorado.. We had snow the winter before Katrina ~ something rarely seen in New Orleans. I have come to associate one with the other (snow ~ hurricane), oddly enough and hope to never have snow here again.
Though the joy you expressed in this poem makes me long for a mountain trip before it melts.
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| Re: Toasting To Our Wedding Night by Beyond_Dreams |
27-Mar-06/6:21 AM |
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âwedding nightâ and âmurderâ an interesting combination, makes for an interesting poem. It gets a little eerie and ends well ~ much like the combination. Nice format of the stanzas.
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| Re: Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
27-Mar-06/6:43 AM |
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Plenty of replies to sift through, interesting and some humorous I must add. My take on this poem is rather simple, that 183 is just that person, that next soul trying to find her own significance in the scheme of things. Arenât we all? I enjoyed this and appreciated the attempt at defining the importance of being ~ 183, as if a person but taken in numbers.
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| Re: Piano by Dovina |
28-Mar-06/11:44 AM |
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I smiled with this read and loved the ending especially. I used to teach piano and laughed to think students might agree with the ending of this one.
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| Re: Sienna by oneglove |
28-Mar-06/11:47 AM |
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Softly sings of seasons, as if ladies twirling around in a dance and changing partners (that of winter and fall). Enjoyed this!
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| Re: Inbetween Lovers/Blueprint by Ranger |
6-Apr-06/1:48 PM |
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Rich and vivid, spins a web around the reader ~ you cannot break the silken strands to stop midstream.
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17-Apr-06/10:45 AM |
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Thoroughly enjoyed! Warped as the world and a little too much truth.
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| Re: Sunday Legs by D. $ Fontera |
20-Apr-06/12:45 PM |
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The first stanza had my attention and visuals in a swirl, but the ending wasn't as bold as I was looking forward to.
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| Re: a dream by lmp |
20-Apr-06/12:56 PM |
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Delightful read ~ something that belongs in a children's book.
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| Re: Morning City by Jack Diamond |
20-Apr-06/12:59 PM |
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The staccato in the beginning is fitting for the sounds you describe. It gives the reader the irritation of disruptive patterns, perfect for the setting of this. Enjoyed.
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