Re: To My Love by Lola	12-Nov-06/12:20 PM
i like this short piece. has the lines "no promises, no demands" which are also lyrics from a song on the topic of love with no promises, nice
Re: My heart belongs to you by creepshow	12-Nov-06/12:13 PM
the real tragedy you write of here is the pain love causes. how can something which is so wonderful to have cause so much pain. i guess poetry is a good way to find that answer
Re: PHOTO by madamefrufru	6-Jul-06/12:42 PM
good solid draft i say could do with some tweaking around the edges to bring it together a bit more. i liked the wording very descriptive
Re: Destruction by kaoriliveshere	6-Jul-06/12:33 PM
this is all a bit crazed and confused a bit like a swarm of bees i guess. was this the idea?
Re: Before Departing by italenrico	1-May-06/1:44 PM
i found this quite a sentimental piece and must admit i rather liked the "tucking you in like a child" line as this portrays the innocence that love can be. great descriptive work
Re: Lost and Found by annadoc	18-Apr-06/4:12 AM
you say in the end lets turn it around but i dont get it as through out the piece you are both negative and positive sides on each line so what needs to be turned around? it seems a very confused piece.
Re: Downpour by annadoc	18-Apr-06/4:05 AM
i think a better quality of poem could have been written by focusing on the final line but so much has been said in a short piece where live feels like a continous downpour
Re: no title by mystic enoch	10-Mar-06/11:24 AM
i like the wording used here and the fitting subject. think if you broke it down a bit into a more sympathetic structure it would flow better and be a far better read. nice work.
Re: a comment on midnight feast by pollywolly	30-Jan-06/9:42 AM
thats what i mean about not wanting to spoil the story if there is one lol cos what i was writing wasnt a horror or scary story but thats how it is being read. even on reading it myself now away from what i was remebering when i wrote it i can see it could be portrayed that way. so do you suggest if i was to expand it i should stray from fact and delve into fiction? tks for your comments very helpful tks
Re: a comment on midnight feast by pollywolly	30-Jan-06/8:00 AM
yes i understand what you are saying. that was the idea to allow the reader to form their own ideas on what would happen next. i myself would say that this is a finished piece which could certainly stretch to a few more verses but i would be reluctant as i think it could spoil the effect by concluding it?
Re: The Fragile silhouette of me by Prince of Void	22-Jan-06/9:12 AM
i think this is written quite beautifully. it just flows from line to line almost taking you into the void. super!
Re: All I Want by AngelicVampiress	22-Jan-06/9:07 AM
reading this as a loner i can understand the words very well but i also believe those not faced with these feeling could also understand what is being said. great movement in parts " fake smile and hide like a coward ". good piece!
Re: Racism 3 by Dovina	15-Jan-06/2:22 PM
this is really good, i read this first then pt2&1 and prefer this. the opening is powerful and makes you want to read on while this powerful message is drawn to the end in same way. very blunt language used to good effect. well done
Re: Desperate Season by Sisterwolf	15-Jan-06/11:48 AM
i like this piece alot. very accurate descriptions and quite animated. i would love to see you write a piece from a different angle e.g how wonderful winter can be. well done
Re: My Reason by PoeticXTC	15-Jan-06/11:29 AM
this seems to be a very angry piece atlest that is the way i read it but i cant seem to find reasons within the anger that justify it?
Re: Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe	15-Jan-06/11:01 AM
i thought this was super, great use of descriptive language where you can almost here the children playing and chattering. well done
Re: a comment on the man with the red pendant by pollywolly	11-Jan-06/2:43 PM
thank you for your comments, much appreciated
Re: a comment on the man with the red pendant by pollywolly	11-Jan-06/2:07 PM
walking past this painting every day and looking at it so much i began to wonder what he was trying to say to me. im not much into art, so i did what all writers do and used my imagination!
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	11-Jan-06/7:35 AM
really enjoyed this piece. i think you have captured human nature so perfectly and showed it so well in contrast with the love of the pet. very well written.