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To My Love (Free verse) by Lola All I can say is
I love you.
No promises.
No demands.
No conditions.
But a life time of
never ending love
for you.
Up the ladder:
Picking Up Sins
Down the ladder:
C.
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Posted: October 11, 2006 1:21 AM PDT; Last modified: October 11, 2006 1:21 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.190725 Overall Rank: 4727 Comments:
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Ranger @ 62.252.32.15
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11-Oct-06/1:50 AM
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Sweet and concise, he's very lucky :-)
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Lola @ 195.229.242.86
> Ranger
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12-Oct-06/12:26 AM
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Thank you Ranger.
I would question whether "no promises" weakens this love, and conflicts with "never-ending."
No promises means 'I won't promise to love him the way he wants me to'.... but all the same I will love him with a never ending love..'my way'.
Now, lola, I'm going to be quite critical on this poem...not because I don't like you, but because you can do better than this.
When you touch on the 'ol lovey-dovey subject we're gonna need something to wow us as the subject is way to common. In this, I get nothing I couldn't get from some cheesey pop song. I'll give you that it seems genuine, but we need something of substance here (i.e. literary devices). p.s. love sucks.
Thanks drnick. I get what you're trying to tell me. I appreciate it.
i like this short piece. has the lines "no promises, no demands" which are also lyrics from a song on the topic of love with no promises, nice
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