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To My Love (Free verse) by Lola

All I can say is I love you. No promises. No demands. No conditions. But a life time of never ending love for you.

drnick 11-Oct-06/11:45 AM
Now, lola, I'm going to be quite critical on this poem...not because I don't like you, but because you can do better than this.

When you touch on the 'ol lovey-dovey subject we're gonna need something to wow us as the subject is way to common. In this, I get nothing I couldn't get from some cheesey pop song. I'll give you that it seems genuine, but we need something of substance here (i.e. literary devices).

p.s. love sucks.




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