My heart belongs to you

Member since 2006 · Posted 13 Oct 2006 · 4 comments

All in all this tragedy pursues, this hatred inside me consumes. The darkened skies, hide my infinite lies. Inside, everyday my heart dies. All of this, this world of piss, conclude in me pass it to you. I can't write anymore, I just can't stand you whore... Forevermore, nevermore. Love to you is enslavement, I smash it to the pavement. Set my feelings aside, all alone, I have died.

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[5] Dovina 13-Oct-06/3:41 PM Reply

Lines like "infinite lies" tell us you have not yet settled upon what you want to say.

[n/a] Ranger 13-Oct-06/5:36 PM Reply

Um, I guess you don't much like her any more.

[n/a] drnick 14-Oct-06/10:38 AM Reply

"Forevermore, nevermore."??????? I sense a severe lack of effort and just like love is enslavement, rhyming seems to have enslaved you.

[6] pollywolly 12-Nov-06/12:13 PM Reply

the real tragedy you write of here is the pain love causes. how can something which is so wonderful to have cause so much pain. i guess poetry is a good way to find that answer