Re: Coney Island Fall by ecargo	4-Feb-06/10:31 AM
I don't get it. Is this some kind of a roller-coaster ride called a cyclone or something like a giant ferrous wheel? Am I hot. Fill me in.
Re: a waste of time by hendrimike	4-Feb-06/10:40 AM
This sounded more like lyrics to me. And anyway, how old are you now.... that you're already contemplating on your life. a waste of time is an apt topic for you theme. I personally feel you should have given it more thought on the presentation. Not enough drunken language in it. Only description of where. Set the scene a bit cause the entire theme is a 'binge'.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Feb-06/12:22 PM
Personally, if I were a retard, I wouldn't want my best friend to degrade the little self respect I might have in me. Defining one, that too your best friend, as a vegetable in degrading terms like mollusc or spastic is to take note of unpleasant things and situations of his handicap. Just because you don't wear a nappy, doesn't mean you don't do the same job. Besides, when you're drunk, God forbid you do, don't you also dribble at BOTH ends? Unpleasnatness is not something to be noted, rather what you can learn out of this and better yourself. Moreover, take the time to appreciate another for his inner qualities, rather than his external appearances. Sorry for the negative critisism. I just couldn't let you get away with such stuff.
Re: An Understanding Woman by Dovina	6-Feb-06/12:28 PM
It's good. I liked it. By the way... congrats. You hit a double century! This is your 200th post on poemranker. Keep up the good work!
Re: Sonnet by zodiac	6-Feb-06/12:37 PM
I think I need explanation. I thought a sonnet had a distinctive rhyme pattern. (14 lines). That I see here. But the alternate rhyming between lines 1-12 is not clear. If I'm wrong about my idea ofa sonnet, please correct me. I find it rather confusing to understand a good sonnet, as I see different style wherever I check it out. This seeems to be a good piece from the vtes that I see, nevertheless, I want to make sure of what I'm voting. Till then...
Re: My Father’s World by Dovina	8-Feb-06/7:55 PM
Am I the first for this? It very good. You have some good stuff in you.
Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	9-Feb-06/9:14 PM
Hi wilco, I haven't seen you around much. Probably it's because I too have't been so possessed by this site lately. This is a good piece, and if you say it's country then it definitely fits. I can't imagine putting rock or reggae into it as I have a strong aversion for the two. You definitely have a knack for writing lyrics. Hats off to you.
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	9-Feb-06/9:37 PM
Alchemy, I didn't quite fit in with the first verse. It was rather deceptive. I thought you were praying to God your Father, and that's when I got into the second verse. It go me off balance suddenly or rather off guard. It's written well though, if it's to your parents.
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	9-Feb-06/10:10 PM
Dovina, I think I have read this earlier. I might not have appreciated this much...more because I am not familiar with the American setting. but now it makes more sense to me. It is written from the heart and gives a sense of wanting it back. I think I owe you a 10 for this.... and I'm glad I didn't vote earlier.
Re: A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	12-Feb-06/11:06 AM
This is a real life experience, and I have been finding it difficult to explain it poetically. I have made an effort to convey this fantastic incident, and am sorry if it is a muddled piece. This incident took place on March 6th 2003 and I don’t think I will ever forget the effect of prayer and doubt our calling to prayer either.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/10:11 AM
Zodiac, truthfully, I didn't connect well with the poem......it's not a topic that has picked my interest.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	13-Feb-06/10:40 AM
Mc.Frantic, this is pretty good. But, I would also rather prefer a definite rhythm. Would enhance the beauty of what you've pictured.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Feb-06/10:08 PM
I think this is a pretty neat piece...... but maybe a bit of rearrangement might be needed. Just a thought.
Re: Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	14-Feb-06/10:24 AM
Isn't it good to say we've come a long way...... that just about sums up the theme of the poem, I think. it's a nice write and to make it better, I'd skip mentioning the 'forty'. It's understood from the title. Just my opinion..... it could be either way according to preference.
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	14-Feb-06/10:48 AM
Ranger, I've just stumbled upon your poem, more like... I looked for your latest poem. It's good, but I will comment on it more tomorrow hopefully. It's pretty late... I could do with some beauty sleep. Nighto...
Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	15-Feb-06/6:40 AM
For those of you who wonder why such a poem is ever written...... check out my previous poem. drnick... you're now famous.
Re: Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy	15-Feb-06/6:55 AM
Hmm not bad. I like the phrases 'soft waters', 'cold boiling ocean', 'blissful abyss', 'die as the suds die'. Things like this make up your poem. About critiquing it, looks like other's have already done so about what came to mind. She's a lucky girl to have someone still dedicate a valentine special to her.
Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac	15-Feb-06/7:09 AM
Quite different from my usual preference,.... but I like it. Are these news clippings from some real event. I ain't much of a news person, must admit that.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Feb-06/8:32 PM
Not particularly my style.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	15-Feb-06/9:35 PM
Who is the inspiration behind this poem?