Re: Bloody Stools 'n' Butterflies by EAger to Offend	9-Jan-06/6:23 AM
Too eager to offend, and not eager enougth to produce stimulating poetry.
Re: Cocoon by Caducus	9-Jan-06/6:21 AM
Nice ending, not the most seductive or venomous portrayal of an evil woman though.
Re: What Matters by Dovina	9-Jan-06/6:08 AM
You do much much better on a regular basis
Re: A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta	9-Jan-06/6:05 AM
Epitomises an irritating and emetic type of yearning and humbleness that should be replaced with a more dignified form of submission to God.
Re: Sunlighting by ALChemy	9-Jan-06/6:00 AM
Cute - but no cigar. Where is the content and the grit to this. I think this is written in a lovely way with rich language and soft tones, but I can’t find anything that gives me what I look for in a poem, it gives all the traditional things such as elegance and flow.... If I were I scholar in poetry then I would give this a 9 for being well-written, but as myself a 4 since it appears to be pointless (even as just an image there is nothing new, just nice well written poetry), I know I’m outnumbered 7 to 1 in this opinion, and that I’m going to embarrass myself somewhere with this comment later on when someone points out the not so hidden meaning, but I can’t find the point to this poem. 4 may be harsh, but I consider your work to be in a better league to most on here, and so I'll rate you by the standards you have set with your previous work, rather than the average on this site.
Re: a comment on Never Let Go Again by TLRufener	23-Dec-05/2:57 AM
I dont mean to cause offense, but your use of cliche to invoke deeper emotions is starting to bug me now, the poem on its own is worth more than the vote I have given it, but after having read many of your pieces I am starting to get bugged. Im sure to the person that this would have been intended, it would be very special to hear it, but to me, I have heard it all before from you, whats next????
Re: a comment on Slaves and their Serpents by cyan9	23-Dec-05/2:52 AM
It was written as an introduction to a set of poems that are dark, broody, but also have a few comic moments, so I was trying to reflect that. The other reason is to draw away from the seriousness of what is being said, to make it a little lighthearted, rather than to go in all guns blazing, I'll be re-writing a few over xmas, so Ill stick this on the list and replace the silliness with something darker.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	23-Dec-05/2:47 AM
Have a good xmas by the way if I dont get a chanc to reply.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	23-Dec-05/2:46 AM
ME: I agree with the hoboes bit, I believe that anything can be improved with the introduction of hoboes, but even better, midgets, theyre amazing. SOMEONE: Fuck you in the eye! ME: Err Sure. ZODIAC: I think Im being too hard on you, you might run away ME: Fuck you in the eye! twice! ME: Have been busy for a while, + will be busy over xmas, but will be back with a vengeance in january. When Im used to a person, piss taking is fine, but with new sorts I tend to get agitated and spew steam out my ears whilst roaring "What did you Say?", it would be difficult for you to go too hard on me these days. ZODIAC: Thats nice. Mines still got hoboes therefore mine is the best. QED
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	23-Dec-05/2:32 AM
The british coastline appears to be of finite length, get a tape measure; however when you start looking at every rock, and measuring around every rock the length of the coastline rapidly expands, as it does the more and more detail you look at it, thus if it were possible to look in infinite detail the coastline would be of infinite length, thus as you look further and further into the detail, you come closer and closer to the conclusion that it is inifinite. Applying the same principle to time, it depends on how much detail you want to look at it, and whether you believe that discrete time intervals exist. You could come to the conclusion that time is infinite even if you knew that the end of the world was tommorrow, based on your scientific belief and acceptance of differing theorums. Personally I believe that there are minimum size particles, and discrete time intervals, yielding finite lengths of time and coastline. Am I making sense? ji, ji , ja, jub , da da da, berrrrr, brum
Re: a comment on Slaves and their Serpents by cyan9	22-Dec-05/5:48 AM
Thanks for the compliment, have a good xmas.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	22-Dec-05/4:34 AM
Its as infinite as the length of the british coastline. PS-Its the love that does its thing
Re: When god manifested by Crakyamuni	22-Dec-05/4:30 AM
Would have voted 10 if it were not for the line "the words haunt the logic in my core", the words logic and core break from the rest of the poem a bit too much. If I am going to knitpick, the first few lines sem to meander nowhere, making a less enticing start to an excellent poem.
Re: Small-town Postal Clerk Considers Inspiration by zodiac	22-Dec-05/4:20 AM
My favourite out of yours so far
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	22-Dec-05/4:09 AM
My cup of tea
Re: Never Let Go Again by TLRufener	22-Dec-05/3:59 AM
Oh the drama of it all, how will I ever go on living without you? well, Frankly my dear, I dont give a damn.
Re: a comment on Heaven Help Me by cyan9	21-Dec-05/3:43 AM
It would be bit of a twisted way of looking at it, even if the description were complete enougth to give abother person the full picture. I think the last verse will need to be rewritten to make the assistance much clearer for it to have the desired effect.
Re: Pandora's Box by PoeticXTC	21-Dec-05/3:35 AM
1st verse is very good, conveys the anger/power well. 2nd verse fades off a bit and is less coherent.
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	21-Dec-05/3:32 AM
A pretty reasonable conclusion, the way I think of it is that by imposing a type you are generalising and as such are innacurate, thus the type is only of value if it is useful to you (such as a way to describe a persons image), in instances where it harms, its use is no longer reasonable. On a similar note just what race are different people, are they memebers of the human race or the caucasian/negro race or the european/african race etc ???
Re: a comment on Heaven Help Me by cyan9	20-Dec-05/7:42 AM
It is the intodroduction to a book of poetry, from which most of the pieces that I post here are from, it is about receiving heavens help, but also not seeing it as well. Its an odd one, and people on allpoetry commented that it was good but needed work, but never told me what.