Re: a comment on Style / Ffordd by Nicholas Jones	11-May-04/9:22 PM
Et aussi, si j'ose en ajouter, 'lui permit', ou bien 'lui permettait', mais non pas 'le', puisque Beckett est un nom propre et non un nom commun.
Re: a comment on Style / Ffordd by Nicholas Jones	11-May-04/9:21 PM
S'il vous plaît... 'Il n'y a guère DE style là:', ce me semble. Et je crois que l'on devrait ne point traduire le titre de la pièce, et donc que le dernier vers se traduise 'Moins qu'en "En attendant Godot" ', étant donné que la pièce de Beckett fut d'abord écrite en français (tout comme le Salomé de Wilde, en fait), et que ce poème fait bien moins de sens si le titre est donné en anglais, puisque l'idée est qu'il n'y a guère de style en français, et que l'on pourrait donc en attendre un peu dans sa traduction anglaise.
Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone	30-Apr-04/5:17 PM
Bwahahahahahaha. Beyond classic.
Re: Loneliness by tuthaliash	20-Apr-04/7:20 PM
Hmm. On the one hand, as hypatia said, you could turn it into a haoku, thus: With furtive passion I kiss the back of my hand And spoon my pillow That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.
Re: a comment on where to go by AskittlesK	25-Mar-04/7:48 PM
Because to sew them, you would first of all track them down, and then have a large enough needle and enmough thread to do the trick. It would also probably be rather messy, as human beings have a tendency to bleed when needles are pushed through their flesh. Not that it's necessarily a bad idea... As for the idea of suing them, I don't believe they've ever done anything they didn't promise to do. Your work is publsihed in an anthology -- if you pay. And suing them on the basis that they promise all the works would be outstandish runs into the tricky defence of artistic merit.
Re: The Case Begins.... by Emotionz	19-Feb-04/7:12 PM
Lose the last line.
Re: Untitled # 112 by nightii	14-Nov-03/7:25 PM
I can't decide whether this is brilliant or bullshit. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt.
Re: Rain by frostygirl	14-Nov-03/7:23 PM
Potential.
Re: Sing to the Past by marvelis	29-Sep-03/9:32 PM
I can't decide whether the second line is brilliant or the most idiotic thing I've read in the last twenty-four hours.
Re: I wish by trisha	29-Sep-03/8:13 PM
Puerilely decent until the last line.
Re: a comment on I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin	10-Sep-03/9:56 AM
There is nothing whatsoever perverted about wanting to look at Razorgrin's ass. Oops, did I just say that aloud?
Re: I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin	9-Sep-03/9:10 AM
Perhaps, dearlink, but with the pants you wear, you still have to make sure you've got your coat behind you every time you sit down...
Re: a comment on A Question of the Future by razorgrin	8-Sep-03/8:45 PM
So she left a comment but didn't leave a comment? Would you please at least try to make a little sense? A 0 does not indicate the worst poem ever built. It represents a remarquably bad poem. And though I don't always concur with my dear friend razorgrin's opinions -- she has made some truly dreadful judgements in the past, both in likes and dislikes -- I'm afraid I must concur that in this case she was right. That WAS a terrible poem you wrote. The fact that a lot of idiotic young goths with bad tastes gave your poem tens does not mean it's a good poem. It means that a lot of young goths have no taste. That's all.
Re: a comment on A Question of the Future by razorgrin	8-Sep-03/7:37 PM
Dear sir/madam/whatever you have the misfortune of being: If she doesn't leave a comment, then how d'you know it was her giving you the zero? Ta ta. P.S.: hmm... started off well, but the last four lines made it lose its charm. You should have spent a little more time there. Only 7/10, sorry.
Re: a comment on The Last Day Of Christ by Mr Pig	4-Sep-03/8:34 PM
You know, for the longest time, Judas wasn't condemned for having betrayed Yeshoua ben Joseph, seeing as how it was necessary for the plan, redemption of all the sins etc. Especially since he tossed the money away, thus showing remorse, which was a very Christian thing to do and the sort of thing to allow redemption for your sins and a place in Paradise. Rather, he was considered damned because he commited suicide, back in the good ol' days when the punishment for attempted suicide was death.
Re: a comment on Iterated Fuck by nentwined	4-Sep-03/5:48 PM
Well, I know 'come' has been used thus spelt, but then it just seems silly, because the immediate reaction is 'What the devil is that verb doing there as a noun??? Oh, wait a minute... considering the context... oh, I get it.' 'Cum', on the other hand, just reeks of really bad porn. The last line's quite good, by the way -- the dream bit, that is.
Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined	4-Sep-03/5:17 PM
I'd like it a hell of a lot more if the word 'Cum' never appeared. 'Come' I might forgive, but never 'cum'.
Re: Mississipi Murder by scitz	4-Sep-03/5:10 PM
A line break does not a comma necessitate.
Re: hehehe by Freethinker1602	4-Sep-03/5:09 PM
No good, but it's great fun.
Re: Mask by sk8boardandpoems	4-Sep-03/5:07 PM
The second line has to be the worst grasping for a rhyme I have seen in my life.