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The Case Begins.... (Free verse) by Emotionz The case begins,
The moon is the judge,
The stars are the jury,
The sky is my witness,
And the night is my enemy, my fear..
My heart is put on trial as
My mind examines it,
My eyes are questioned as it disguises my tears,
My ears say what they hear
But my tounge denies it,
In the end im found guilty of LOVE....
Up the ladder:
this one is for Jon
Down the ladder:
Another Day
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Posted: January 9, 2003 3:15 AM PST; Last modified: January 9, 2003 3:15 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.7317934 Overall Rank: 11749 Comments:
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scitz @ 62.105.88.10
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9-Jan-03/4:35 AM
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This was a force until line 6 then -generic ......5
The first five lines show promise. The end however, sucks so hard that no amount of cinnamon toast will quench my hate. grrr..0.
hilarious, good one.
This bears a striking resemblance to an event that occurred at Luncheon to-day. Dr. Marlowe, H. Fortesque and myself were enjoying a fine gammon steak on the lawn when I felt a troubling sensation in my breeches. To cut a long story short, Dr. Marlowe had to be put down, and I was found guilty of fraud in the First Degree.
a plebiscite upheavel, a true enbrowning.
Lose the last line.
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