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I wish (Free verse) by trisha I wish I could turn back the hands of time,
Turn them back to when we were together
When everything was perfect and everything was nice
Everything was nice, you could call it perfect
Perfect cause you were there
You were there with me
Now there is nothing left to say
Except I wish I could turn back the hands of time
Because I think there broken!
Up the ladder:
steps of pain
Down the ladder:
WE
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Posted: January 4, 2003 10:45 PM PST; Last modified: January 9, 2003 5:09 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.602657 Overall Rank: 12493 Comments:
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purplestain @ 161.142.101.238
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5-Jan-03/7:30 AM
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this is a nice poem and i can relate to it. however, the last need to read like this...because i think they're broken!
fix the question marks.
"Now there nothing left to say"
Now there is nothing left to say. try that.
they are.
Puerilely decent until the last line.
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