Re: Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29	30-Oct-02/8:09 PM
No quoting Shakespeare at the end of poems, it makes you look like a child trying to appear intellectual.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	30-Oct-02/8:08 PM
Please tell me this is meant to be a funny poem. I gave you a high mark on the assumption it's meant to be this funny. If it wasn't, I'll have to bring down my vote by a lot.
Re: God's Gift by Mutant_X	30-Oct-02/8:03 PM
I might have actually bothered to read this if there was a hint of correct spelling somewhere in it.
Re: Martyr by kawakurdi	30-Oct-02/7:56 PM
'Satan pooh-poohed' is dreadful in this context.
Re: a comment on morning by kiki	30-Oct-02/7:46 PM
'Basel: German name for Basle. Basle: a commercial and industrial city on the Rhine in NW Switzerland; pop. 171,000 (1991). French name Bale, German name Basel.' I fail to see how a city can move in someone's brother. Unless you're misspelling 'basil', which makes just as much sense. Or do you mean bowel?
Re: Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on	29-Oct-02/9:12 PM
Excellent moments, but needs work.
Re: morning by kiki	29-Oct-02/9:05 PM
'Basel movements'?
Re: Are you spreading it? by Voth269	29-Oct-02/7:40 PM
No. I am not. It is extremely sanctimonious and boring. I prefer to blaspheme. Bathe in holy water. Get drunk on Christ's blood. Grow fat on consecrated wafers. Burn crucifixes. Laugh at modern churches that look like spaceships about to take off. Hide in the confession booth and read porn to the priest. I must not think about this question, because I know I am not spreading it. I am spreading my own self-glorification. I am laughing in the face of God and burning Bibles. As for the fate I reserve to this poem, I cannot decide, because the Bible at least has some literary merit
Re: End of life by kliq	29-Oct-02/7:35 PM
It starts amusingly, but the ending is ridiculous.
Re: a comment on ... by logun2002ya	29-Oct-02/7:32 PM
Sheer claptrap. You are not unique, you are pretentious. Spelling it 'eye' merely makes you look like an imbecile, unless you're a poetic genius a la cummings, who could get away with it. The problem is that the poem is nowhere near a quality that will make people regard you as a genius making himself look special: rather, you look like either an illiterate fool or, worse yet, an illiterate fool trying to excuse his bad spelling by saying it makes him special.
Re: Beer by Yardbird	29-Oct-02/9:13 AM
Though I agree with your verdict on beer (though may I add it should be 'horse piss'), as a poem this is almost as detestable as the subject. Or was that the point?
Re: Selfish by darby pyn	29-Oct-02/9:09 AM
Not bad. Not bloody bad at all. Just one little thing, 'foretell' is the verb. The noun is 'fortelling'. I.e., 'A foretell' makes no sense.
Re: The Black Hearted Sunflower by anitawit	29-Oct-02/9:08 AM
Though I can be a pedantic purist, in this case, I simply don't find it a very good poem, haiku or not.
Re: a comment on advice for the heated by <~>	28-Oct-02/8:49 PM
I did get it, but then it must be too subtle. Unless they mentioned somewhere they were going to meet on the back seat of a car and I missed it. It just seems a bit too 'Real-world' for them, that's all.
Re: a comment on Is It Love by angel_uy	28-Oct-02/8:47 PM
Ridiculous. Their having the same subject is no excuse for their sounding quite so similar. If you can only speak of your love for this character in this one tone, I suggest your love is not particularly profound. And bleeding hell, what is this obsession with constructive criticism??? Constructive criticism! Constructive criticism indeed! The hell with constructive criticism. I would like to thank you for making me notice that I really and truly detest that term, along with all it implies. WHY, might I ask, should I give constructive criticism? Hmm? Oh no, this is the modern age, and we're all very politically correct, and we musn't say nasty things, we might bruise these poor people's fragile little egos... who gives a flying monkey's mid-air fuck? If your egos can't take insults, tough, and good luck in the world. The hell with constructive criticism. I have no interest in your poetry, and all I ever mean to express is my personal opinion on the poem. Why should I help you to make it better? If you cannot better it on your own, that is your own problem. Now, of course, you'll ask me if I don't prefer getting cosntrutive criticism rather than insults on my poems. The sort of criticism you want is always interesting, but then the insults are always funny -- sometimes in their inventiveness, sometimes in their mind-boggling idiocy. On this site in particular, the heckling is often better written than the poetry anyway.
Re: a comment on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>	28-Oct-02/8:34 PM
Well, that's better. It's only as long as two lines of one of its quatrains now, instead of three. Hell if I know, I've always been terrible at titles myself. Hmm. Do you remember what I voted on this?
Re: advice for the heated by <~>	28-Oct-02/8:31 PM
Curses. I thought this was going to be advice to God's wife and Blabbit. How could you dissapoint me so! Sgnif.
Re: In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>	28-Oct-02/8:28 PM
Just change the title.
Re: ... by logun2002ya	28-Oct-02/8:00 PM
Quite obvious you were never good in English. I'll let you in on a secret: 'I', as in the pronoun that means 'me', is spelt 'I', not 'eye'. 'Eye' is your eye, as in the gooey thing stuck in your skull you use to see. Much quicker to just write 'I'.
Re: other by ThreeFourSix	28-Oct-02/7:57 PM
This is amusing. But it could be such better poetry, and just as funny. I judge it as poetry and deem it bad.