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... (Free verse) by logun2002ya inspiration
to be aquired,
no other drug
can take you higher...
peace of mind
when sound asleep,
the dier need
for one more release...
can you help me
eye'm begging, please
eye'll do anything
eye'll get down on my knees...
this feeling inside
eye'm trying to hide,
if eye let it out
will the pain subside?
just one more fix...
then eye'll try.
(eye dont really know where this one came from...well...my mind of
course, but eye dont know what eye was thinking about when eye wrote it..
.it isnt formatted right...eye think...but then eye was never really
good in english)
Up the ladder:
A poem from the sky
Down the ladder:
My Feet
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.4444447
Posted: October 28, 2002 1:52 AM PST; Last modified: October 28, 2002 1:52 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.7222223 Overall Rank: 11861 Comments:
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Tintagiles @ 142.166.234.90
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28-Oct-02/8:00 PM
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Quite obvious you were never good in English. I'll let you in on a secret: 'I', as in the pronoun that means 'me', is spelt 'I', not 'eye'. 'Eye' is your eye, as in the gooey thing stuck in your skull you use to see. Much quicker to just write 'I'.
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logun2002ya @ 64.12.96.139
> Tintagiles
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29-Oct-02/5:03 PM
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that is the most contrite and obvious critisism and it is usaually a sign...eye can see inside your mind, and loosers never fail...it doesn't matter how it's written, it doesnt matter what eye say, a good poet feels his heart and uses words to push his sway...obviously you try to be just like everyone else...me eye am unique...you should try it sometime
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Tintagiles @ 207.179.148.50
> logun2002ya
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29-Oct-02/7:32 PM
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Sheer claptrap. You are not unique, you are pretentious. Spelling it 'eye' merely makes you look like an imbecile, unless you're a poetic genius a la cummings, who could get away with it. The problem is that the poem is nowhere near a quality that will make people regard you as a genius making himself look special: rather, you look like either an illiterate fool or, worse yet, an illiterate fool trying to excuse his bad spelling by saying it makes him special.
There is a word for people like you and currently it escapes me. If only I could think of it... Imbecile will have to do for now. Using a homonymn of one word does not make you unique, it just makes you silly.
I'm not sure of the word you're thinking of, limonade, to describe this one, but I'd use "pukeypoo".
That's a good word.
you read it, and you responded to it, and eye am sorry if it impaired your sight...but truth be told...poetry is young as well as old...poetry is peace and wrath...poetry is taken and passed...comments come and go, you...noone will ever know...me...eye know who eye be...more than unique for mirror eyez catch the reflection of you as your gone...but my heart will transpire and carry on...watch what you say...eye might come to bite you one day...
Logun, just what in the name of all that is covered in frosting supposed to mean? oh yes, I understand now: it means you're a weiner.
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