poemranker ::A poem from the sky by Roisin

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 5390

A poem from the sky

Member since 2002 · Posted 19 Jul 2002 · 4 comments

You always seemed so far away, So high up in the infinite sky. I could not see your soul. When I at first saw you in perfect clarity I would've wondered whether The distance had ever really existed Had it not been for a distinct feeling that overcame my whole And I, in turn, became entangled with it. The heady rush that swam And Dizzily Meandered through the heart of my head. I had been lifted by you. I began to see like you, Know you, Feel what you- what I Was feeling. So used to being held suspended I was from you That I didn't realise that I was floating On my own. My reflection Slowly burning away in your eyes- An ever diminishing star . And I saw you soon after Distant again Only this time facing away from me. But I have now learnt That without you I can fly free. Without ties I can appreciate all that you gave to me When you brought me up here.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 4.44 weighted 4.72 rank 11842 views 184 View voting details →

9 votes so far. Yours would make 10.9 votes so far

4 comments

[4] nentwined 8-Sep-02/2:04 AM Reply
poem rhythm/flow/cliche could use some work.
[8] forestchild7 19-Jul-02/6:28 PM Reply
life, love, poetry... it just works...
[8] Frass 19-Jul-02/8:53 PM Reply
Strong, descriptive, creative phrases for feelings in a romantic relationship. Somewhat of a disempowered female feel, though. As if the man is god; he's not.
[4] dilips_10 20-Jul-02/3:31 AM Reply
it a point