| Re: Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins |
11-Apr-03/3:40 PM |
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For some reason, I've always been making SARS rhyme with arse. But it works said like that too.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Aug-03/8:57 PM |
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Yes, yes, yes, I KNOW it's silly, pointless, melodramatic, and, for that matters, makes no sense. I was just trying to see if I could write a poem of more than twelve lines in this scheme, that's all.
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| Re: Loki's Tryst by OneFingerAnswer |
31-Aug-03/9:28 PM |
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Hmm. I'm not sure I'm convinced. Perhaps this is because it's not my favourite bit of the whole leadup to Ragnarok, possibly because I know so many wonderful prose versions of it that seeing it put into rhyme seems a little wrong, somehow. I dunno... it's not that's it's bad or anything, but it leaves me rather cold.
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| Re: cold sonnet by <~> |
4-Sep-03/5:03 PM |
It seems dreadfully snarky to quote you something you once said to me, dear Tilde, but...
"i'm awash in the imagery, but it's a tsunami".
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| Re: Mask by sk8boardandpoems |
4-Sep-03/5:07 PM |
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The second line has to be the worst grasping for a rhyme I have seen in my life.
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| Re: hehehe by Freethinker1602 |
4-Sep-03/5:09 PM |
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No good, but it's great fun.
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| Re: Mississipi Murder by scitz |
4-Sep-03/5:10 PM |
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A line break does not a comma necessitate.
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| Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined |
4-Sep-03/5:17 PM |
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I'd like it a hell of a lot more if the word 'Cum' never appeared. 'Come' I might forgive, but never 'cum'.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
5-Sep-03/8:30 PM |
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DISCLAIMER: despite all appearances, Howard Phillips Lovecraft, his various minions, and all Cthulhu cultists (even of the plush variety) had no inspirational role in the creation of this poeme that I'm aware of.
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| Re: I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin |
9-Sep-03/9:10 AM |
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Perhaps, dearlink, but with the pants you wear, you still have to make sure you've got your coat behind you every time you sit down...
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| Re: I wish by trisha |
29-Sep-03/8:13 PM |
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Puerilely decent until the last line.
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| Re: Sing to the Past by marvelis |
29-Sep-03/9:32 PM |
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I can't decide whether the second line is brilliant or the most idiotic thing I've read in the last twenty-four hours.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
5-Oct-03/8:39 PM |
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DISCLAIMER: I personally believe this to be an absolutely dreadful poeme. I only posted it here as it was the easiest way to get an acquaintance of mine to read it. At her special request, I'm going to keep it up, despite its evident mediocrity. It's nothing but a silly, pretentious rant about how I haven't been able to write any music in weeks. I meant it to serve as therapy, and it didn't even do that.
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| Re: Rain by frostygirl |
14-Nov-03/7:23 PM |
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| Re: Untitled # 112 by nightii |
14-Nov-03/7:25 PM |
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I can't decide whether this is brilliant or bullshit. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt.
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| Re: The Case Begins.... by Emotionz |
19-Feb-04/7:12 PM |
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| Re: Loneliness by tuthaliash |
20-Apr-04/7:20 PM |
Hmm. On the one hand, as hypatia said, you could turn it into a haoku, thus:
With furtive passion
I kiss the back of my hand
And spoon my pillow
That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
25-Apr-04/10:22 PM |
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As thoughts, amusing. As poetry, shite.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Apr-04/7:13 PM |
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Did you recite this aloud as you left?
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| Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone |
30-Apr-04/5:17 PM |
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Bwahahahahahaha. Beyond classic.
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