Re: Putney at Low Tide by Christof	10-Sep-02/7:55 AM
Shouldn't it be "caonoe," (not period?) Do you need the periods?
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/8:02 AM
Have you tried learning their alphabet? Daunting at first, you will recognize their patterns if you make the effort. You can teach an old dog new tricks.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/8:16 AM
oh my! I can almost feel the sheets stuck to my drenched thighs! yes!
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/8:17 AM
You switch from plural to singular in the last stansza. you also don't need to include the parenthetical comment at the end. and why say 'life sucks'?
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/8:20 AM
Your poem shows how well you can mimic. It is a good poem, it is a funny, but not necessarily accurate satire. I just don't get why you are so bitter towards god'swife. Jealous, maybe?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Sep-02/7:54 AM
How are tears magic?
Re: Torn... by loneshadow29	12-Sep-02/7:59 AM
perhaps 'burdensome beast' would work better for you. a beast of burden is an ox, or the like, and i don't think you're writing about going around with farm animals strapped to your back. regardless, i hope that, by now, you have shed it.
Re: Gone Away by Christof	12-Sep-02/8:01 AM
Gone away, or returning soon? The focus is morbid, but touching. Why do you think that you will outlive her? Statistically, we live longer than you gents. Could you not live without her?
Re: Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn	12-Sep-02/8:01 AM
Do you really want everyone to get stuck at the title? If not, I suggest you change it.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Sep-02/8:02 AM
And certainly beyond the scope of this poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Sep-02/8:04 AM
Almost lovely and full of empty. are there up so many floating bells down in this meadow of yours?
Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	12-Sep-02/8:10 AM
BRAVO!!!! WELL DONE, SIR! You are indeed a champion, and prove without a doubt that the keyboard is mightier than AIDS (but not mightier than Jesu, of course.)
Re: Swimming by [mojo]	12-Sep-02/8:11 AM
Perhaps a companion would make this swim possible once again?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Sep-02/8:12 AM
Am I being dense? Is 'the only option" the same as 'the final solution' in ww2?
Re: untitled#3 by darby pyn	12-Sep-02/8:15 AM
I have tried, but can make no sense of this. which would be fine, if it least entertained me. but it does not. how sad.
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	12-Sep-02/8:17 AM
Who's next?
Re: lost by Katie	12-Sep-02/8:18 AM
Why would someone your age let another be your everything? Look in the mirror, and smile. Put it out there; There'll be lots more takers baby.
Re: she wonders, by <~>	13-Sep-02/8:48 AM
Dreamy, and painful--now that i've read the comments. Hang in there; lots of fish in the sea (I know you don't want to hear that, but give it some time, dear, give it some time.)
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-02/8:53 AM
I don't know how she could have known that the cars were going to crash beneath her open window. Isn't that waht you imply by saying 'stage'? Doesn't make sense to me. Explain please?
Re: Waking Up by PawnedTidal	13-Sep-02/8:54 AM
Anger management. In written form. Healthy choice, PT