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Torn...

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Sep 2002 · Edited 13 Sep 2002 · 10 comments

In a world of uncertainty I dwell in a house of sorrow Inner demons once silenced Their voices return to haunt me Cutting into my very soul Sitting on a throne of doubt Unsure of what to do My heart and mind unclear Torn by the unknown Frozen solid with fear Depression's icy touch Chilling me to the bone What must be done to rid me of this horrid burdensome beast I sit and ponder silently As my demons casting dark words, sorrowful thoughts into my mind I pray for the answers to come soon So my eyes may return to clarity To see the world once again In the light I've always wished to see

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[7] vulcan 12-Sep-02/7:50 AM Reply

Dark indeed!7

[6] Limness 12-Sep-02/7:59 AM Reply

perhaps 'burdensome beast' would work better for you. a beast of burden is an ox, or the like, and i don't think you're writing about going around with farm animals strapped to your back. regardless, i hope that, by now, you have shed it.

[n/a] loneshadow29 › Limness 19-Sep-02/1:04 PM Reply

thanks for the comment... burdensome beast doest sound a bit better and thank god that burden has long since been shed. :o)

[10] Katie 13-Sep-02/12:25 PM Reply

dark indeed. But i do like it 10/10 =)

[10] Katie 13-Sep-02/12:25 PM Reply

dark indeed. But i do like it 10/10 =)

[3] pete 13-Sep-02/2:40 PM Reply

the universe does not care about you .... work for your own 'salvation' .... 3

[n/a] loneshadow29 › pete 17-Sep-02/1:24 PM Reply

I'm sorry you felt my poem deserved such low marks... Just to let you know that I have worked to find my salvation and I've achieved it... and I really don't care if the universe doesn't care about me... because I know the people who do... I wrote how I felt... end of story... I don't mind criticism but to be rude is another story...

[7] vulcan › loneshadow29 3-Oct-02/9:53 AM Reply

I like your answer very much!I feel really great that you've really felt your poem!I read it once more and am reviewing your poems!just a curiosity,have you read "The City of Dreadful Night"?He knew how to console us!we LoneShadows!please let me know if you have!

[n/a] loneshadow29 › vulcan 3-Oct-02/10:59 AM Reply

Unfortunately, I've never read "The City of Dreadful Night" until just now... and I'm glad that you mentioned it... such dark words he spoke... I knew those words well... thank you once again...

[0] poetandknowit 19-Sep-02/1:27 PM Reply

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