on Innocence Having Been Lost by dougsoderstrom
9 Jul 2004, 6:18 PM
I don't entirely agree with it, but I'm not judging you're opinion, I'm judging the poem, and the poem isn't that bad.
on Love doggerel by thavimatola
26 Jun 2004, 2:19 PM
What does nuclear plant have to do with anything besides the fact that it rhymes with can't?
on There was . . . by baphomet
25 Jun 2004, 6:32 PM
I don't like the form this was written in at all. It makes it seem unlike poetry. If you had just written it in a different form, I think that would have made it a lot better. My rating won't reflect that, though. Just for future reference.
-Nichole-
P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd read and review one of my poems in return.
-Nichole-
P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd read and review one of my poems in return.
on ILLusion in Falsity by Sugar Victim
25 Jun 2004, 6:27 PM
I like this. It's harsh and blunt, but I like that it's straight-forward. The rhymes don't really distract the reader eithre, especially at the end. At the beginning, they were kind of shoddy, but it's okay, because the poem was good. I really enjoyed this. I hope to see another one like it...
-Nichole-
P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at one of my poems too.
-Nichole-
P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at one of my poems too.
on A decade and five years of thought. by baphomet
22 Jun 2004, 11:47 AM
I don't like the rhyming in places, but the story is good, so I shall rate it well. Just try to stay away from forced rhyme in the future please.
-Nichole-
-Nichole-
on Insight by Moniquesuvee
22 Jun 2004, 11:37 AM
very much so
on Crucifixion of a Man by marvelis
22 Jun 2004, 11:34 AM
"The pain does not appear to exist.
Although the slightest wind does persist."
This is forced rhyme. "The slightest wind" persisting as little to do with what you talked about in the previous line. I know this is a religious piece, and it was something good that you were trying to portray, but I really have a hot button on forced rhyme, and this is forced.
Although the slightest wind does persist."
This is forced rhyme. "The slightest wind" persisting as little to do with what you talked about in the previous line. I know this is a religious piece, and it was something good that you were trying to portray, but I really have a hot button on forced rhyme, and this is forced.
on Strings and Sinews by aburiedlife
22 Jun 2004, 11:31 AM
It's confusing. I think you're trying to say that you're amazed that you can just throw away all the bad things in your life, but I'm not completely sure. If you edit, I'd try to make this a little clearer.
on The Sea (revised) by Dovina
22 Jun 2004, 11:26 AM
First off, thanks for reviewing my poem, Inside.
This poem was really good. The images were remarkable. I loved your wording. I would have elaborated a little more on the last two stanzas, explain what you meant a little bit more, but that's my only complaint.
-Nichole-
This poem was really good. The images were remarkable. I loved your wording. I would have elaborated a little more on the last two stanzas, explain what you meant a little bit more, but that's my only complaint.
-Nichole-
on what i do? by trina_marie_73
22 Jun 2004, 11:22 AM
Very cliche...
on Promise of Resurgence by marvelis
22 Jun 2004, 11:17 AM
You're trying to get across a good message, but I can't give you a good rating. The rhymes are just too forced. Rhymes aren't always terrible, but in this case, it distracts the reader from the meaning of the poem.