on Bottom by ThoughtfulSoul
7 Oct 2002, 7:39 AM
I think if you start with"There at the bottom is a lonely place"it would seem as if you're speaking from there.(So the force of personality shall work better in that way).good!I like personally-felt poems.(I had something very much like this esp the end of it!i.e.I understand!)6/8
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
7 Oct 2002, 12:31 AM
Perfect!I'm happy I checked your poems!and found this strange artistic monument there!(there's no exaggeration on my part,I've read enough poetry to see what is good and what Perfect!)10
on A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29
5 Oct 2002, 10:26 AM
I really liked it!very tender and heart-piercing!BUT what on earth means that HORRIBLE homepage?if you really feel your poems you'd better do away with that page!That was not Sorrow nor despair and not even nothingness!I felt really disapointed!I hope you change your mental picture!Horror!
on Breathless. by Service
4 Oct 2002, 12:42 AM
Well I liked it!except for the last stanza!(I expected you to say "I lost my life in a peaceful dream"!but still the first line of the last stanza is good enough"but now it brings peace, I prefer to be"how do you like it?sorry just a suggestion!7/9
replying on Torn... by loneshadow29
3 Oct 2002, 9:53 AM
I like your answer very much!I feel really great that you've really felt your poem!I read it once more and am reviewing your poems!just a curiosity,have you read "The City of Dreadful Night"?He knew how to console us!we LoneShadows!please let me know if you have!
replying on Melancholia by vulcan
3 Oct 2002, 9:41 AM
Thanks Shadow very much.
replying on Twisted Swords of Love & Hate by DreamMachine
29 Sep 2002, 12:32 AM
I liked it very much and vote 10 for this!
on Transfixed (#2) by Christof
28 Sep 2002, 7:40 AM
10 and beyond!(it fits any anthology of perfect pure prancing poetry!)10!
replying on It could be a vase.... by Joyleaf
28 Sep 2002, 7:26 AM
To tell the truth I find the poem's mystery interesting!but sorry to disappoint you I really don't know what's that vaselike object!will you tell me?
on It could be a vase.... by Joyleaf
27 Sep 2002, 11:40 AM
Interesting!(I think you'd better omit "which is" in 3rd stanza)6
on Witch to Wicca by Lenore
27 Sep 2002, 11:33 AM
Excellent Lenore!(and your view is quite right!)-I think it sounds much better if you put "Spilled gasoline after "somebody's"(but did divide it so because of "Fire"?)I liked your "every minute is a hurried whisper" 9/10 (sorry is it not a house in line19,Great anyway!)
on Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof
24 Sep 2002, 8:33 AM
Hi Christof!you try to pierce into my psyche!I was inspired to write "a man of the world",when I recalled H.G.Wells'"A door in the wall".have you read that?one of the best short stories I've ever read.(of course the Priest and the ring was my own invention!)-A 10 for your poem!
on Morning conflict by INTRANSIT
24 Sep 2002, 8:23 AM
Interesting view 7.
on Since The Fall by harrytuttle
24 Sep 2002, 8:21 AM
I like it 7.
on Unveiled by aperfecttool77
24 Sep 2002, 12:32 AM
Don't you think that your poem recalls no special atmosphere in one's mind.It looks and sounds blank.you lack words as you've said in your poem.add something blanker at least at the end and i'll like your style.
replying on Unveiled by aperfecttool77
24 Sep 2002, 12:29 AM
a charming answer!