| Re: Bottom by ThoughtfulSoul |
7-Oct-02/7:39 AM |
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I think if you start with"There at the bottom is a lonely place"it would seem as if you're speaking from there.(So the force of personality shall work better in that way).good!I like personally-felt poems.(I had something very much like this esp the end of it!i.e.I understand!)6/8
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
7-Oct-02/12:31 AM |
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Perfect!I'm happy I checked your poems!and found this strange artistic monument there!(there's no exaggeration on my part,I've read enough poetry to see what is good and what Perfect!)10
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| Re: Dad by Flattop |
6-Oct-02/11:58 PM |
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| Re: A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29 |
5-Oct-02/10:26 AM |
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I really liked it!very tender and heart-piercing!BUT what on earth means that HORRIBLE homepage?if you really feel your poems you'd better do away with that page!That was not Sorrow nor despair and not even nothingness!I felt really disapointed!I hope you change your mental picture!Horror!
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| Re: Breathless. by Service |
4-Oct-02/12:42 AM |
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Well I liked it!except for the last stanza!(I expected you to say "I lost my life in a peaceful dream"!but still the first line of the last stanza is good enough"but now it brings peace, I prefer to be"how do you like it?sorry just a suggestion!7/9
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| Re: a comment on Torn... by loneshadow29 |
3-Oct-02/9:53 AM |
I like your answer very much!I feel really great that you've really felt your poem!I read it once more and am reviewing your poems!just a curiosity,have you read "The City of Dreadful Night"?He knew how to console us!we LoneShadows!please let me know if you have!
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| Re: a comment on Melancholia by vulcan |
3-Oct-02/9:41 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Twisted Swords of Love & Hate by DreamMachine |
29-Sep-02/12:32 AM |
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I liked it very much and vote 10 for this!
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| Re: Transfixed (#2) by Christof |
28-Sep-02/7:40 AM |
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10 and beyond!(it fits any anthology of perfect pure prancing poetry!)10!
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| Re: Char by Amelia |
28-Sep-02/7:38 AM |
Sorry for the misspelling!Amalea!
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| Re: Char by Amelia |
28-Sep-02/7:37 AM |
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Why Amaelea!If you have tons of poems like this get them published!9/10
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| Re: a comment on It could be a vase.... by Joyleaf |
28-Sep-02/7:26 AM |
To tell the truth I find the poem's mystery interesting!but sorry to disappoint you I really don't know what's that vaselike object!will you tell me?
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| Re: It could be a vase.... by Joyleaf |
27-Sep-02/11:40 AM |
Interesting!(I think you'd better omit "which is" in 3rd stanza)6
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| Re: Witch to Wicca by Lenore |
27-Sep-02/11:33 AM |
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Excellent Lenore!(and your view is quite right!)-I think it sounds much better if you put "Spilled gasoline after "somebody's"(but did divide it so because of "Fire"?)I liked your "every minute is a hurried whisper" 9/10 (sorry is it not a house in line19,Great anyway!)
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| Re: Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof |
24-Sep-02/8:33 AM |
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Hi Christof!you try to pierce into my psyche!I was inspired to write "a man of the world",when I recalled H.G.Wells'"A door in the wall".have you read that?one of the best short stories I've ever read.(of course the Priest and the ring was my own invention!)-A 10 for your poem!
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| Re: Twilight by grrund |
24-Sep-02/8:25 AM |
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A tender filial expression.Nice7
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| Re: Morning conflict by INTRANSIT |
24-Sep-02/8:23 AM |
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| Re: Since The Fall by harrytuttle |
24-Sep-02/8:21 AM |
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| Re: Unveiled by aperfecttool77 |
24-Sep-02/12:32 AM |
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Don't you think that your poem recalls no special atmosphere in one's mind.It looks and sounds blank.you lack words as you've said in your poem.add something blanker at least at the end and i'll like your style.
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| Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77 |
24-Sep-02/12:29 AM |
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