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Twisted Swords of Love & Hate (Free verse) by DreamMachine Twisted swords of love and hate,
There is no other force at work now except fate,
A knife shatters,
But I hear no cry,
Except a song of birds with no lullaby,
And for this I know i've spilled my blood,
But I don't know how much more I could,
A river turns red as I lie there still,
But time stops at my will,
And as I lie there half awake,
I think of a distant time and my mistake,
A portal opens and the door is shown,
But instead I am left there all alone,
To wonder this earth for countless years,
But my time does not fade,
It just dissappears
Up the ladder:
Precious Gift
Down the ladder:
jane
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: September 25, 2002 6:45 PM PDT; Last modified: September 28, 2002 3:54 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6661 Comments:
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nonee @ 202.131.124.49
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25-Sep-02/9:57 PM
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waoh ! ... it's good ....it's really good ..or maybe i'm screwed to say so but it's good ..... the words just seem to just flow without any hinderance .. maybe i'm going to keep it on my desktop for some days now....
waoh ! ... it's good ....it's really good ..or maybe i'm screwed to say so but it's good ..... .. maybe i'm going to keep it on my desktop for some days now....
I've read this over and over. I love the images you give your reader. It is a dark but lovely poem. The deepest poem I have read on this sight yet.
Thankyou all of you! ( the avg rank of this poem was 5.17 but I had to edit it due to the fact that I discovered a spelling error in it...please revote it if you havent already, thankyou! )
I liked it very much and vote 10 for this!
I am glad you enjoyed it...
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