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15-Sep-02/8:30 AM |
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Bravo!I liked it very much.you have expressed the feeling very truly.(just i think after the case of girlfriend poem ends unexpectedly.Did you mean it?)10
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| Re: .:|bittersweet|:. by emman |
21-Sep-02/9:42 AM |
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Well!the personae's ambiguity of character leaves an impression on reader (at least on me)7
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21-Sep-02/11:21 AM |
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I like this one too.you write with genuine feelings.7
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| Re: For You by aperfecttool77 |
22-Sep-02/11:19 AM |
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"when I die,it will be known I died for Coelia"read that sonnt by W.Percy?The same theme.I liked it as I liked that sonnet.(of course in a different level.)6
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22-Sep-02/11:27 AM |
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Sorry,I'read something very similar to this before.I remember this because I liked it.Sorry!The last line is only different!you've added that?the poem was anonymous!Was it yours?Please let me know it!your own poems are good enough!If it's yours So 10
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| Re: The End OF Me by Birdman42s |
22-Sep-02/11:28 AM |
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| Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/12:53 AM |
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Very nice and Classic,lenore!
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| Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/12:54 AM |
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23-Sep-02/12:55 AM |
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24-Sep-02/12:26 AM |
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I liked the last stanza.6
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| Re: Unveiled by aperfecttool77 |
24-Sep-02/12:32 AM |
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Don't you think that your poem recalls no special atmosphere in one's mind.It looks and sounds blank.you lack words as you've said in your poem.add something blanker at least at the end and i'll like your style.
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| Re: Since The Fall by harrytuttle |
24-Sep-02/8:21 AM |
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| Re: Morning conflict by INTRANSIT |
24-Sep-02/8:23 AM |
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| Re: Twilight by grrund |
24-Sep-02/8:25 AM |
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A tender filial expression.Nice7
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| Re: Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof |
24-Sep-02/8:33 AM |
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Hi Christof!you try to pierce into my psyche!I was inspired to write "a man of the world",when I recalled H.G.Wells'"A door in the wall".have you read that?one of the best short stories I've ever read.(of course the Priest and the ring was my own invention!)-A 10 for your poem!
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| Re: Witch to Wicca by Lenore |
27-Sep-02/11:33 AM |
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Excellent Lenore!(and your view is quite right!)-I think it sounds much better if you put "Spilled gasoline after "somebody's"(but did divide it so because of "Fire"?)I liked your "every minute is a hurried whisper" 9/10 (sorry is it not a house in line19,Great anyway!)
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| Re: It could be a vase.... by Joyleaf |
27-Sep-02/11:40 AM |
Interesting!(I think you'd better omit "which is" in 3rd stanza)6
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| Re: Char by Amelia |
28-Sep-02/7:37 AM |
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Why Amaelea!If you have tons of poems like this get them published!9/10
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| Re: Char by Amelia |
28-Sep-02/7:38 AM |
Sorry for the misspelling!Amalea!
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| Re: Transfixed (#2) by Christof |
28-Sep-02/7:40 AM |
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10 and beyond!(it fits any anthology of perfect pure prancing poetry!)10!
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