Re: a comment on Insurance Frauds by skaskowski	23-Jun-04/10:47 PM
Happy to entertain. That's why I go on stage.
Re: A Surrender of the Heart by Torok	23-Jun-04/10:45 PM
Why would she feel hate? She is content alone. He has problems, but the last line doesn't seem to work for her.
Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	23-Jun-04/10:41 PM
Now that I've calmed down from my little catfight with god'swife (and by the way I appreciate your comments there) I'll say something about your poem. I like the feel of it. That's not astute, but it's the kinda thing that gets you through the night. Cheers.
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/10:24 PM
Hey, Zodiac, did you consider that Dan’s comment could be taken several ways, as my poem hopefully can. He might have really meant that I would like to see it appear in "Seventh Day Adventist's Monthly" or some similar publication. He could have meant that for it to so appear would be ludicrous. When he says, “Perfect for . . . “ he’s probably being facetious, meaning that it is far less than perfect for such a publication because the poem contains hints that such unbreakable faith is not attainable except in self-deception. I think he just might be able to interpret his way out of a week-old cod-bonnet.
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/5:49 PM
Still, it would be a comfort to KNOW such answers. I envy anyone able to be so comforted, truly envy them. For me, it's a riddle I feel compeled to pursue til I die, even knowing I cannot solve it. I wish no harm or disbelief to people of faith, and hope not to disple their confidence. I like to say I'm wiser and sader, but really I'm just sader.
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/4:26 PM
I am a medocre female who has upset everyone on Poemranker by unintentionally making them think I have written a promotional poem for God. That is one of three interpretions, make that four, and I'm looking for anyone who cah see one of the others, better yet, someone who can see the ambiguity that is me, that is this poem, that has lived here before, that is not a bigot. Yes, I am hot now, but not, probably as you want. I drive men away like this.
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/4:12 PM
Not even if I come to Tennessee, listen to your music, and not insist on a hyphenated name?
Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	23-Jun-04/4:08 PM
I prefer hyphenation so you may want to court elsewhere. I Dov- in- a- pond, and none of them knew me.
Re: Insurance Frauds by skaskowski	23-Jun-04/2:29 PM
Anytime you can take two apparently unrelated things and make one a metaphor for the other, you're into the dancefloor of poetry. Some of your wording is hard to follow, but what you are doing is not. I'll take that anyday over a perfectly formed poem with nothing to say.
Re: Heroin by zenhaircut	23-Jun-04/2:22 PM
I like the thrust of this poem, its persistance toward the end, its showing how cynics' needles hurt like the real ones. You also run the course fron infatuation to dissillusion with haroin. Good. "There is no antidote for lonliness except ill hope"
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/1:48 PM
I find it a great comedy that people who devote so much energy to the accurate phrase, the descriptive word, can mire under word-clouds of misunderstanding. The audiance reading this will surely laugh as I say that you have totally misunderstood or I have totally mis-written. Sorry to have bothered you.
Re: a comment on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	23-Jun-04/9:17 AM
Thank you for finding my poem a suitable place to vent your frustrations. I mean that seriously and with no animosity. I feel a bit honored to be the presenter of material that arouses someone in any way. It’s really quite unusual. I wish you would read the poem again and tell me why you hate it, if that’s not asking for the obvious. On the other matters, I agree with much of what you are saying, and though I’m a new persona on Poemranker, there’s a de déjà vu of having felt as you feel.
Re: Puppet & Conversation by Blindpoetry	22-Jun-04/10:11 PM
Who cares what God , the puppeteer, thinks. But then, I could be wrong.
Re: Best Boy by MacFrantic	22-Jun-04/10:04 PM
First verse is great. Might consider ending with it. I can definitely relate to this.
Re: a comment on Quiet, Kind Hills by Dovina	22-Jun-04/12:14 PM
"Helpful" is anything above 0, anything that says it might not be totally idiodic to continue posting here, your vote and comment, for example.
Re: a comment on The Sea (revised) by Dovina	22-Jun-04/9:03 AM
Sashimi and pink beach people are generally served raw, and what's generally accepted is what we should try for in our food and our poetry, don't you agree?
Re: a comment on The Sea (revised) by Dovina	22-Jun-04/8:40 AM
After writing out the spirit of this, I adopted a semi-form for a poem and started pushing things into the form. But soon I felt cramped within my own clutches and let most of it flow formless. Your suggestions are good, except wasabi is best with sashimi.
Re: Drunk and Fucked Up by wilco	22-Jun-04/8:08 AM
This sounds and feels singable and sad. I can hear it late in a smoky Tennessee bar, a guitar man strumming, and me thinking of all the bad times. Hit me with another chorus Wil.
Re: a comment on Quiet, Kind Hills by Dovina	22-Jun-04/7:50 AM
Thank you all for your comments. They have been helpful.
Re: a comment on Center Of The Universe by Dovina	22-Jun-04/7:44 AM
Thank you, I might just do that. We all put up a stink of sorts.