Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	30-Oct-04/2:01 PM
It’s nice to lead and please, so thanks. It’s nice to taunt and tease, so there. How’s that for an unsupportable general statement.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	30-Oct-04/2:00 PM
A merely masculine viewpoint likes Horus better. Why Intransit, I’m surprised.
Re: a comment on Dear George Bush by scitz	30-Oct-04/10:27 AM
You too combine 10-votes with 0-comments. Is it the English mind?
Re: a comment on Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	29-Oct-04/2:53 PM
Like a song of hope that deviates from the thing hoped for, covering it over in pretty prose. If child abuse is the object of god's wrath, then this is hardly how it resolves. A more forceful ending seems appropriate.
Re: Dear George Bush by scitz	29-Oct-04/11:51 AM
You never saw this kinda thing happen when the Democrats were running the country.
Re: The Star Of The Bum by Blindpoetry	29-Oct-04/11:21 AM
"very Horrendous" is the same as horrendous, and why capitalize it. "I think much like Nothing About You" means something, but what?
Re: From Womb To Wood by Caducus	29-Oct-04/11:13 AM
From the last 3 lines, her son died as a baby. It's a moving picture as is, but, I'd have preferred to know this sooner.
Re: Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	29-Oct-04/11:07 AM
Explaining a poem is like calling it a riddle. I prefer to glean what I can without explanation. You could title it "Child Abuse," since your title is redundant anyway. Using King James English detracts unless you are consistant. Grammetical problems in lines 5, 8, and line 3 of S2. Good use of the tic Overuse of the wrath of god, unless you do more with it than say it four times. A lot of criticism? Yeah, but I agree with what you're saying.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	29-Oct-04/10:53 AM
Thank you, but I do love to know why.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	29-Oct-04/10:52 AM
I could make it not just bigger, but overwhelming, or boring. It’s hard to be entangled in a memory and say anything coherent about it. Thanks. “More depressing than tragic,” yes, maybe because my going there, seeing the remains, closed a door that had remained ajar for years after any possibility of entry had departed.
Re: Ash by horus8	28-Oct-04/6:45 PM
A house is a house is a house, An ended thing an' black. But why not "and" and "B"?
Re: a comment on An Even Better God by wilco	28-Oct-04/6:34 PM
Flimsy. That said, remember that just because posting doesn't necessarily mean you haven't been on the ranker, failing to log in might.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	28-Oct-04/6:27 PM
100% it seems.
Re: An Even Better God by wilco	28-Oct-04/12:22 PM
What makes you think you can slither away without a word, and come waltzing back a month later without so much as a flimsy explanation. I'm melted by "special thanks" though and can only say, Welcome Back. This is a very funny take-off on "A Better God" and also quite profound if you want to open discussions on whether such a god exists, and if so, whether he sends hurricanes, earhtquakes and plagues in anger. Your last two lines pretty well sum up where such discussions end.
Re: Summer nights alone and their affect on the psyche by oneglove	27-Oct-04/1:44 PM
Title sounds like a master's thesis. "hands on my heart" - like it. S2 - why not leave out the The"'s? "beloved" sounds archaic in this context.
Re: Alone by rrashi	27-Oct-04/1:40 PM
Beware of the ten-vote and the opposite comment. Too many commas. "Smell filled with perfume" is wordy and redundant. "happy and rejoiced" sounds funny. To feel one with nature is to use a cliche. Some good ideas needing better words.
Re: a comment on A Man Who Cares by Dovina	26-Oct-04/2:32 PM
lol. Never engage a man in his own game. I might learn.
Re: a comment on A Man Who Cares by Dovina	26-Oct-04/1:11 PM
Found and left as was And now I know the cause No respect for decency laws ‘Twas DA not Santa Clause
Re: a comment on A Man Who Cares by Dovina	26-Oct-04/12:40 PM
It's always the one with a mouthful of accusations. flushed out. You should be ashamed.
Re: a comment on A Man Who Cares by Dovina	26-Oct-04/10:24 AM
Well it’s like this: The bowl was yucky til this customer decided to lift the lid. The chain had slipped off its handle as chains do, and he slipped it back on. Then he found a plunger and took care of the yuck. I could have done that, but didn’t want to soil my hands. What better definition of a good man can you find?