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A Man Who Cares

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 25 Oct 2004 · 9 comments

Chain in the tank broken today Porcelain bowl clean and bright Shirt sleeve wet in the Hill Street Cafe

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[n/a] Imago 25-Oct-04/8:23 PM Reply
An Ode to plumbers everywhere. Nice little ditty.
[10] Dan garcia-Black 26-Oct-04/7:34 AM Reply
Great storytelling. Has the chain been fixed yet?
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 26-Oct-04/10:24 AM Reply
Well it’s like this: The bowl was yucky til this customer decided to lift the lid. The chain had slipped off its handle as chains do, and he slipped it back on. Then he found a plunger and took care of the yuck. I could have done that, but didn’t want to soil my hands. What better definition of a good man can you find?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 26-Oct-04/12:12 PM Reply
yeah well you shouldnt of done you're massive stool there in the first place no wonder the mctoilet went tits-up.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Oct-04/12:40 PM Reply
It's always the one with a mouthful of accusations. flushed out. You should be ashamed.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 26-Oct-04/12:55 PM Reply
I am ashamed. Ashamed of you. You who have left
an unspeakable undrinkable
in the porcelain ranks
of Armitage Shanks.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Oct-04/1:11 PM Reply
Found and left as was
And now I know the cause
No respect for decency laws
‘Twas DA not Santa Clause
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 26-Oct-04/1:49 PM Reply
Robed in stench and labour pains
O'er the toilet bowl she strains.
Wretched wails, and glist'ning brow:
OH GOOD LORD PLEASE END IT NOW!

And callously she leaves the boothe
Writhing in a swollen truth.
Left behind to be reviled:
A CATACLYSMIC BROWNIAN CHILD!
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Oct-04/2:32 PM Reply
lol. Never engage a man in his own game. I might learn.