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Summer nights alone and their affect on the psyche (Free verse) by oneglove
They tell me days are getting shorter But I’ve never been much for the science of things The hands on my heart must be running slow They’re losing minutes every day -------------------------------- The summer has started The tides have turned The night begins to reclaim the day The setting sun will slumber sooner The orange shades of the crashing sun air in prime time The idiot box has run out of new things to say The brilliant hues in the sky are the new must see The cooling air creates the perfect atmosphere Love is blooming and it strolls through the town Hand in hand in the moments before twilight It is here I wait for my beloved But you, my love, cannot be found --------------------------------- These words are never enough I always write them anyway These miles are always too much I swear I'll right them some day

Up the ladder: Or Outward
Down the ladder: Our Soldiers

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6722
Posted: October 26, 2004 6:52 PM PDT; Last modified: October 26, 2004 6:52 PM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 17.255.240.6 | 27-Oct-04/1:44 PM | Reply
Title sounds like a master's thesis. "hands on my heart" - like it. S2 - why not leave out the The"'s? "beloved" sounds archaic in this context.
[n/a] zodiac @ 195.158.204.2 > Dovina | 28-Oct-04/10:34 AM | Reply
A real Master wouldn't have used "affect" as a nown. He would have used "effect". Nice catch!
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