Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	2-Nov-04/9:05 AM
I’m glad you understand it. My greatest fear was that with so many pronouns, the meaning would cloud.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	1-Nov-04/8:16 AM
Zody is grumpy today and tries to cause a ruckus. He’s like the rider of a loud Harley, enjoying his noise and the irritation all around him.
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/3:26 PM
Thank you.
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/3:02 PM
If an egret is a bird and a heron is a bird, then an egret can be a heron, but is not necessarily a heron according to the proposition. Therefore, A can be B. Check "Philosophy for Dummies," I’m sure it will agree. As for "believe hopefully," I know it sounds silly to believe and hope at the same time, almost contradictory, like lying to instill trust, like telling his Alzheimer’s wife he’s going to the store, when he’s really going to meet a woman for a few hours of understanding and conversation to ease his mind and relieve his nerves from incessant nagging.
Re: a comment on Going Blind by Sasha	31-Oct-04/12:29 PM
Line 10 is tetrameter. Line 8 seems to have 6 beats. Several lines are iambic only on a stretch of the word. None of the above makes any difference to me.
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/11:57 AM
he says, sliding into my comment as if it were a fitted brogue.
Re: Going Blind by Sasha	31-Oct-04/11:56 AM
Why offset the last line?
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/11:33 AM
Feeling the pinch, are we?
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/10:48 AM
I can say cop-out, expediency, caring, love, lies, and trust, all in the same breath, and believe hopefully that I mean them.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	31-Oct-04/10:19 AM
Under a hazy Florida sun, in the median, three tall birds stand - underestimating.
Re: Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	31-Oct-04/9:47 AM
If you're going to post a revision, at least correct the spelling!
Re: Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	31-Oct-04/9:44 AM
The first verse nicley evokes a sad tale coming, except for the rogue comma. I love openings like this. Is it a heron or an egret? They're about the same, right?
Re: a comment on The Star Of The Bum by Blindpoetry	31-Oct-04/9:32 AM
You are right about blahblahlbah.
Re: a comment on Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	31-Oct-04/9:28 AM
I wish you would stop ignoring me when I comment on your work. You went off in another direction, this time as before, and did not address what I was trying, in a constructive amnner, to tell you.
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	31-Oct-04/9:18 AM
We have a few people on this site who seem blind to their own faults, while they pour salt into the perceived wounds of others. It’s good hear someone, once in a while, looking squarely at himself and making the best of who he is.
Re: a comment on Ending by Dovina	31-Oct-04/9:10 AM
Thank you, it was a beautiful place in the country, and now it’s only a memory. Returning to the ruin was the ending of possibilities, not a depression really, but the final knowledge that that memory is a memory, and nothing else.
Re: Trust by Dovina	30-Oct-04/8:41 PM
Next caller please. And by god, this better be good!
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	30-Oct-04/8:31 PM
Profuse thanks, but you're six bricks short of a full load, pal.
Re: a comment on Trust by Dovina	30-Oct-04/6:57 PM
Not to be insipid.
Re: a comment on Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	30-Oct-04/2:11 PM
More forceful than procuring a spot of holy ground through his word. More forceful than a seed growing and blooming, in between which processes lies a host of work. More forceful that simply turning into something pure as if it’s a gentle ride.