| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
15-Aug-05/2:10 PM |
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Never before have you zeroed me. Why?
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| Re: a comment on Words by Dovina |
15-Aug-05/2:09 PM |
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Correction: I ignore vain praise as many times as it is given, but htank you for commenting.
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| Re: a comment on Words by Dovina |
15-Aug-05/2:06 PM |
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Shift+F7 brings up Thesaurus in Ms Word. I suppose that's like holding the ladder.
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| Re: Shadow by TLRufener |
12-Aug-05/7:27 PM |
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I like it except for the use of "them" and "they" in referring to a person. The ending is great.
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| Re: sculpture by ThePariahDog |
12-Aug-05/7:25 PM |
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The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
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| Re: Forever by my side by RGSsparky |
12-Aug-05/7:23 PM |
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Good thoughts, but need better poetic expression.
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| Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined |
12-Aug-05/7:15 PM |
Do you mean "off my face"?
"a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing.
It does seem that simple sometimes.
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| Re: Home by Bethy |
9-Aug-05/6:54 PM |
I like the rhythm.
She walked up and down
paw > pa?
The last 2 lines confuse. Maybe you mean "she'd do anything but go back there"
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| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
9-Aug-05/12:44 PM |
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Yep, you're onto me. Don't know where all these other comments come from.
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| Re: a comment on My Prince by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
9-Aug-05/11:37 AM |
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| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
9-Aug-05/11:35 AM |
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No, only a certain girl was Jerry's kid.
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| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
9-Aug-05/11:35 AM |
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I don't think either of them fell into any pit blind.
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| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
9-Aug-05/11:34 AM |
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| Re: a comment on First by Dovina |
9-Aug-05/11:34 AM |
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Neither Geneses nor Jerry is demeaning to women in my opinion.
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| Re: REMEBER by prettyktm |
9-Aug-05/7:56 AM |
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You've got potentisl for a good poem here, but the grammar is terrible.
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| Re: My Prince by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
9-Aug-05/7:52 AM |
"two" "dark"
Would you love your Prince if you discover he had lied to you?
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| Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
9-Aug-05/7:42 AM |
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Thanks for saying "even Dovina didn't catch it." Makes a person feel almost omnipotent.
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| Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken | |
9-Aug-05/7:39 AM |
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You can say those things, but you cannot prove them, just as CS Lewis cannot prove his statement. You are applying blunt logic to sensual things, and it comes out terse and without feeling. I'm not opposed to mixing logic and feelings, but I think you go too far in the logic direction.
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| Re: Dear Aunt Leonard by T. Jonathron Remp |
8-Aug-05/2:09 PM |
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| Re: Mirrored by MacFrantic |
8-Aug-05/2:07 PM |
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Cute, but could be cuter.
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