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First (Free verse) by Dovina Adam may be the first man,
but Jerry was the first boy.
Adam gave a rib for Eve.
Jerry gave some daffodils.
Up the ladder:
Confusion
Down the ladder:
A Child Learns (haiku)
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Posted: August 9, 2005 7:49 AM PDT; Last modified: August 9, 2005 7:49 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8569565 Overall Rank: 10495 Comments:
and Jerry, after Adam
fell into the pit like blind
I don't think either of them fell into any pit blind.
So we're all Jerry's kids?
No, only a certain girl was Jerry's kid.
Then Juan came along and Adam and Jerry never heard from Eve again.
In all seriousness though. Don't you think Genesis is a bit demeaning to women. Someone should rewrite it. It's not like it hasn't been done before.
Neither Geneses nor Jerry is demeaning to women in my opinion.
Was Jerry your first boyfriend...if so...nice...am I on the right track...first thing it made me think of...my first ...crush guy, gave me a Gordie Howe hockey card... :) Bethy
Yep, you're onto me. Don't know where all these other comments come from.
Proper.
Verily. -0-
Never before have you zeroed me. Why?
I really really really didn't like it. As poetry or anything else. No hard feelings, I hope.
I spent an hour last week trying to write a reply explaining why I didn't like it. Then I thought, well shit it's not like she spent an hour writing the poem in the first place. I also spent a long night reading Genesis last week and have decided Genesis is demeaning to women and you are demeaning to women. This shouldn't come as a surprise to you. The only way to make Genesis not-demeaning (which, I should add, I do as a matter of course) is by being flexible enough to squeeze through your own asshole. On top of that, I have very little idea what you mean by this poem.
And Jesus said "It is easier for zodiac to squeeze through his own asshole than for a woman to get a membership into the great golf courses of heaven."
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Final thought - confuzled.