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sculpture (Free verse) by ThePariahDog here i stand
roughly hewn
from a block
lifeless too
excavated in
tawdry glint
eye collapse
with consent
Up the ladder:
light [edited]
Down the ladder:
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Posted: August 11, 2005 8:12 PM PDT; Last modified: August 11, 2005 8:12 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2145653 Overall Rank: 4373 Comments:
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ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69
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12-Aug-05/6:44 AM
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This is a concrete poem. Pretty neat on too.
The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
neat!
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