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REMEBER (Free verse) by prettyktm
Remember How we were When we were innocent Catching butterflies With our fingertips We climb to the rooftop Counting sliver star And we tap each other On the heads When we saw a shooting star Remember How we swam Into the cool water Pulling each other's legs While building castle of sands Those honey cakes And ice cool icecream On hot summer days Sharing gifts on birthdays Then suddenly the war came And you went away From friends we turn into enemies I lit to you,you lie to me Three years there was hate Broken hearts and broken home gates Depression and desolate everywhere Each land had dugged graves We lay side by side A bullet in my head Two bullet and you too die Our blood mixed up Still our hands hold guns.

Up the ladder: A Glass of Water
Down the ladder: Awakening

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10587
Posted: August 9, 2005 12:25 AM PDT; Last modified: August 9, 2005 12:25 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 9-Aug-05/1:18 AM | Reply
You didn't REMEBER to put another M in remember.
By the way if you cut off your penis do you think the doctor would remember you?
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > ALChemy | 9-Aug-05/10:04 PM | Reply
HI,I agreed that it is a huge mistake.but as for the doctor and
the penis well,I don't know coz,I am a girl.
[4] Dovina @ 12.72.22.143 | 9-Aug-05/7:56 AM | Reply
You've got potentisl for a good poem here, but the grammar is terrible.
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > Dovina | 9-Aug-05/10:06 PM | Reply
HI,SORRY ABOUT THAT.
[5] T. Jonathron Remp @ 128.252.229.185 | 9-Aug-05/8:15 AM | Reply
Remeber: To meber again.
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > T. Jonathron Remp | 9-Aug-05/10:06 PM | Reply
HI,I've try to stop these mistakes.
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 > prettyktm | 20-Aug-05/9:57 AM | Reply
See now that's ironic.
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > ALChemy | 21-Aug-05/12:08 AM | Reply
Thanks for your comment.but it's also something which is nearly a
fact.take care.
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