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Drinking and driving (Free verse) by SILYLILGURL EEEEEERRRRRRRKKKKKK CRASH!
The sound of the car
crashing into a brick wall
That's the last minute
of their lives
That's how fast our
life goes by.
All the people died except
The driver
who was left
to feel guilty
from drinking and driving
Always thinking
How fast our lives go!
Up the ladder:
Dress rehearsal
Down the ladder:
A Special K
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Posted: December 30, 2003 8:44 PM PST; Last modified: December 30, 2003 8:44 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.8509965 Overall Rank: 10538 Comments:
It almost an exact commercial-script of a goverment sponsored television community message.
I've heard/seen the same exact shit on radio & cable television.. You can't get more unorginal than this girlie. Heres a two..
The onomotopeaia of the first line doesn't really work for me. Beyond that, this reads as the outline of a poem that covers tired ground, but could say it in an interesting manner.
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A life gone in a flash.
Screaming sirens pierce the air,
Broken dreams scattered here and there.
I'm not a poet, but something like that.