poemranker ::Drinking and driving by SILYLILGURL

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Drinking and driving

by SILYLILGURL

Member since 2003 · Posted 30 Dec 2003 · 3 comments

EEEEEERRRRRRRKKKKKK CRASH! The sound of the car crashing into a brick wall That's the last minute of their lives That's how fast our life goes by. All the people died except The driver who was left to feel guilty from drinking and driving Always thinking How fast our lives go!

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[9] sliver 31-Dec-03/7:54 AM Reply
Been there, stupidity is pervasive when alcohol is involved. Be more specific, discribe the scene, Mangled metal and broken glass, A pool of blood,
A life gone in a flash.
Screaming sirens pierce the air,
Broken dreams scattered here and there.
I'm not a poet, but something like that.
[2] SupremeDreamer 6-Jan-04/1:04 PM Reply
It almost an exact commercial-script of a goverment sponsored television community message.

I've heard/seen the same exact shit on radio & cable television..

You can't get more unorginal than this girlie.

Heres a two..
[4] nentwined 24-May-05/7:12 PM Reply
The onomotopeaia of the first line doesn't really work for me. Beyond that, this reads as the outline of a poem that covers tired ground, but could say it in an interesting manner.