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REMEBER (Free verse) by prettyktm

Remember How we were When we were innocent Catching butterflies With our fingertips We climb to the rooftop Counting sliver star And we tap each other On the heads When we saw a shooting star Remember How we swam Into the cool water Pulling each other's legs While building castle of sands Those honey cakes And ice cool icecream On hot summer days Sharing gifts on birthdays Then suddenly the war came And you went away From friends we turn into enemies I lit to you,you lie to me Three years there was hate Broken hearts and broken home gates Depression and desolate everywhere Each land had dugged graves We lay side by side A bullet in my head Two bullet and you too die Our blood mixed up Still our hands hold guns.

Dovina 9-Aug-05/7:56 AM
You've got potentisl for a good poem here, but the grammar is terrible.




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