regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-05/8:05 PM
I like the dreamy feel of this. I think "t h e r e" is unnecessary, italics or not. And after "your task" it seems a dash would bre better than a semicolon. In the last verse, it seems They should be they. The two "look"s should omit the comma, I think, for consistency.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-05/8:29 PM
It may be best for you, but you haven't made it compelling.
Re: Planting a Stake by Alizarin_Crimson	12-May-05/8:32 PM
A bit long and rambling for a poem, but it's a unique style, and not badly told. "amount of swimming pools" should be "number of swimming pools."
Re: A backsliders struggle by nicole081083	13-May-05/11:53 AM
Too many words. It would be stronger with half as many.
Re: self-observation in a chatroom with lack of sleep by nentwined	13-May-05/1:18 PM
It slides downhill from the good first verse, as you no doubt intend. Get some rest!
Re: I sat beside the night by Niphredil	14-May-05/5:35 PM
This is quite good. I think it has more punctuation than needed. I'd change the first ; to "and" and omit the second one, and omit all the commas, using line breaks instead.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-05/5:40 PM
Europe, from the POV of an American, has changed from the quaint provincial self it used to be. Hey, you're a European aren't you? What's going on? Maybe the title needs another look.
Re: Mid Years by Dovina	15-May-05/7:51 AM
zodiac, I’m responding to your several comments about relationship. I disagree that “two important aspects of the relationship are some common understanding of the nature, formed early on, and, yes, sexual compatibility.” That’s such a male thing to say and ignores a woman’s view altogether. Yes, women want good sex, and yes, we want some cerebral understanding of why we are in the relationship, but these are secondary. When you say, “I don't agree that emotional support is the most important aspect of relationshipping,” you have killed the most important thing to us and replaced it with your own needs and desires. As a woman who has loved a man, I had no desire to deny his needs and desires; I wanted to meet them because I favored his happiness equal with my own. So we worked together at compromises and gratification of each other. By the way, if what you want most is good sex, and I don’t believe it is, then it’s going to be much better when she is emotionally thinking that you care a great deal about her emotions.
Re: Bookends by INTRANSIT	16-May-05/12:38 PM
Clever!
Re: Old Lady and The Sea by Joe-joe	16-May-05/12:43 PM
I want to think this is about an old woman. I guess I can if I want. And for that a 9.
Re: Complex Composition by al-naafiysh	16-May-05/12:50 PM
This is quite good and a situation I can relate to. It's nice to be with someone who is "afraid of me intellectually," but nicer to banter with someone as an equal or where I'm slightly inferior. Don't worry about rockmage. When he gives you a 5, he likes your work.
Re: I want to know what a lifes like.... by Damien	16-May-05/12:54 PM
This looks like a response to someone who said, "Get a life." Maybe you should change the title to that.
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	16-May-05/1:08 PM
You're doing a great job with Poemranker, but if you expect a crowd-joining high vote for this, think again.
Re: Meters of my destiny by Bhuwan	16-May-05/1:10 PM
You're kidding?
regarding some deleted poem...	16-May-05/2:39 PM
You're insane. They cannot all be your best friend. I think it's the mollusc (mollusk).
Re: Learning to Drive by jessicazee	17-May-05/12:24 PM
Although the ending implies what you really learned through the experience, I think a more compelling comparison could be made.
Re: Panthera pardus by ingwa	17-May-05/1:56 PM
I'd give it a more reader-friendly title. First verse is good. Third verse: Use immense or huge, but not both. Slinks should be slink to go with "you." In the fourth verse you change from "you" to "he" Why? I think you shouldn't. Welcome to poemranker.
Re: The Awesome One by ingwa	17-May-05/1:59 PM
Not as good as your first. I counted three grammatical errors.
Re: Bush Fire by ingwa	17-May-05/2:14 PM
You seem to know what your are talking about, but the presentation is lacking. Description lacks color, the ending is not provocative. For example on the last verse: Always the risk An act of God Always new Never expected
regarding some deleted poem...	19-May-05/12:15 PM
The first verse is good. The rest is rather confusing.