regarding some deleted poem...	19-May-05/12:25 PM
Edge is such an unlikely ending, but I keep hoping. Maybe a person should just get used to tails fifty percent of the time.
Re: Transition by INTRANSIT	19-May-05/12:29 PM
I always wondered how to get seven beats in the second line. Now I know.
Re: Blue Executioner by Caducus	19-May-05/12:37 PM
How about "Moving to the light"? Strange how rockmage votes, and how often.
Re: I Remembered, Upon Waking by Alizarin_Crimson	19-May-05/12:52 PM
A good idea. I think it would be better to leave "me" out of it after the first two verses.
Re: I Remembered, Upon Waking by Alizarin_Crimson	20-May-05/11:56 AM
I hate to disturb a perfectly symmetrical voting pattern, so I'll just say that it's still a pretty good poem and better with the changes and just can't figure out rackmage these days.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-May-05/5:45 PM
Spooky. A good read.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-May-05/11:31 AM
Unplanted plantations - subdivide and sell off the land, or go poor.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-May-05/11:57 AM
"slightly disappointing" doesn't match the description that follows. Other sloppy lines show that this is merely a first draft, not ready for posting.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-May-05/11:59 AM
The trouble is that it is not explicit.
Re: Making a Mark by andrew barnes	23-May-05/12:14 PM
An interesting scenario of possible outcomes. The ending seems wrong though, because some traces of humanity would doubtless remain. And immortality having a time limit is just mis-worded.
Re: After a Show at the Lyceum by andrew barnes	23-May-05/12:24 PM
Nice. "revelling in it" -> "reveling"
Re: Return by windyone	23-May-05/12:29 PM
Too sappy for general appreciation.
Re: Swoon by Dovina	23-May-05/1:56 PM
Thank you, rockmage, for your timely and predictable response. By the way, did you read the poem?
Re: Spontaneous Combustion by wilco	23-May-05/3:47 PM
Sounds like a Willie Nelson wail.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-May-05/10:35 AM
Somewhere in Jamaica, mon, an ebony hand strokes a poinciana pod. He likely has a voodoo doll, but harms it little for folks in America, regretting their music mixes with so much self abuse.
Re: The Jesus Belt by Caducus	24-May-05/10:49 AM
Good. Just a few take-it-or-leave-its: "and belief turned lies"? "A father's seed"? "made to bleed"?
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	24-May-05/10:55 AM
"skim layers of skin" - that lava soap did that. Didn't know you lived next door.
Re: MTV's The Real World: Poemranker by Bluemonkey	24-May-05/11:14 AM
Wish I could do that.
Re: Semite to Semite by PodPoet	24-May-05/11:26 AM
You should set off the refrain some way, indented perhaps, Maybe call this a lyric. Most of this is good, but "worship" goes too far.
Re: Untitled by camperdfl	24-May-05/11:29 AM
Yes, sweet retribution. Kill him, that'll fix the matter.