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Blue Executioner (Free verse) by Caducus I learned of love from moths
as silk fell from strip-lights
it languished and burned
In the coldness of my fixed gaze
Life flickered in lights,
Dying in its dust.
Silhouetted,
in a see through tomb.
Now I think of us,
When I once lived in light
And you engulfed me in darkness.
Your worm silky touch
on trembling larvae
that was drawn to your love
like moths to the blue executioner.
You are a maven
and I the learned,
who lays stiff amongst moths
alive yet paralyzed.
Seeing them arrive from darkness,
to go to the light
and share this bed of silk and dust
to be like me,
loves rigor mortis.
Up the ladder:
Breathless
Down the ladder:
america The Beautiful
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Posted: January 6, 2005 2:16 AM PST; Last modified: May 18, 2005 3:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.2384057 Overall Rank: 4066 Comments:
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Beyond_Dreams @ 67.51.232.76
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6-Jan-05/9:39 AM
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nicely written
well done
How about "Moving to the light"?
Strange how rockmage votes, and how often.
Don't worry about rockmage. His voting average is 5.6 on all of his 2637 votes, but of his most recent 500 votes, all have been zeros except 4. I don't know what's come over him, but if we keep jabbing, maybe he'll break silence and tell us.
No,no; I received a Rockmage 7. I had it framed.
The Zero is an award with a leaden weight. According to the granter it means that the poem totally failed as a poem. That's a quite drastic conclusion. Some poets might disagree. I would say, it's an obligation to come up with some sort of explanation. On the other hand, why explain anything to people who you consider total non-poets?
And I once received a rockmage 10, which I consider as bogus as the zeros. Without an explanation, a vote is worthless in my sordid opinion.
Yes, I'm goin to ignore 'm from now on and also refrain from voting myself. A comment can be so much more useful.
That's like moving away from America because some people abuse democracy. Sure we have a few characters who regularly give a 10 combined with a comment that means zero. And we have revenge voting - 1 for 1, and thank-you voting - 10 for 10. And we have a few who give a 10 to certain individuals regardless of their poem, even if it is intended as worthless jest.
After you've been here a while, you might suddenly find yourself on the Best list. From there on it gets ugly. But you can see there's no more reason to join the bogus voting crowd than there is to stop voting.
<< you might suddenly find yourself on the Best list. From there on it gets ugly >>
Yes! Yes! Crack that whip! Lash me some more Ahhhhhhh
Shit. I'm still trying to get on the WORST list! Until I have succeded, I cannot call myself a true poet. What of that?
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